Haiku Battle

Lumi · 2011-02-04T00:28:34Z

Note: This is not in need of reviews as it is not a literary work. This is a game-type activity. Here's a poetry exercise to sharpen our description with as few words as possible. Could that mean Haiku? That's right, folks. We here at the poetry forum are gonna duke it out--not with swords or guns, but with words. Seventeen syllables worth, to be precise. If you're not aware of what a Haiku is, here's a quick note: Haiku is a form of poetry consisting of three lines, respectively measuring 5/7/5 in beats. A Haiku is typically about nature, and more often than not denotes a particular season in which the poem takes place (though it doesn't have to, by any means). They're beautiful things, and, while small, can take masterful lyricists to craft. Senryu are similar, although they deal with more human ideas/emotions/situations. They're my personal favorite. Same format. So this is our battle, poets! The task is simple: merely post a Haiku or Senryu. The major hitch of the exercise is that the first line of your poem must feed off of the last line of the one above yours. The entire poem may be different, but they'll all be connected. One huge Poem Chain. To begin: Downpours in the south make rivers strong as wildfire; April boasts its strength.

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Thu Feb 10, 2011 3:50 pm

lilymoore says... · Thu Feb 10, 2011 3:50 pm

On the range top stove,
the cracked tin kettle screeches
and steam melts her face.

Never forget who you are, for surely the world will not. Make it your strength. Then it can never be your weakness. Armor yourself in it, and it will never be used to hurt you.

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Thu Feb 10, 2011 5:35 pm

Button says... · Thu Feb 10, 2011 5:35 pm

The water whistled,
pouring expectations of
peace and tea to air.

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Sun Feb 13, 2011 10:04 am

Lumi says... · Sun Feb 13, 2011 10:04 am

Tea, hot and thin, spilled
on the obituaries;
do you miss us?

I am a forest fire and an ocean, and I will burn you just as much
as I will drown everything you have inside.

-Shinji Moon

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Sun Feb 13, 2011 11:23 am

Button says... · Sun Feb 13, 2011 11:23 am

Ink spread like death, and
we gasped as your name spilled out,
almost like a ghost.

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Mon Feb 14, 2011 9:12 am

Hannah says... · Mon Feb 14, 2011 9:12 am

Plastic wrapped around
your delicate fingertips
reminds me of ash.

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Tue Feb 15, 2011 7:49 am

Lumi says... · Tue Feb 15, 2011 7:49 am

Ash fell from your lips,
a phoenix in the twilight.
Your life is a pyre.

I am a forest fire and an ocean, and I will burn you just as much
as I will drown everything you have inside.

-Shinji Moon

I am the property of Rydia, please return me to her ship.

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Tue Feb 15, 2011 7:54 am

Jagged says... · Tue Feb 15, 2011 7:54 am

What more can I burn?
First were your letters to me,
and last was my heart.

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Tue Feb 15, 2011 8:03 am

Snoink says... · Tue Feb 15, 2011 8:03 am

Carbon dioxide
rises from the flickerings
of a dying flame

Ubi caritas est vera, Deus ibi est.

"The mark of your ignorance is the depth of your belief in injustice and tragedy. What the caterpillar calls the end of the world, the Master calls the butterfly." ~ Richard Bach

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Tue Feb 15, 2011 3:36 pm

Button says... · Tue Feb 15, 2011 3:36 pm

Embers flared up, but
died under my glare; you weren't
to be remembered.

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Tue Feb 15, 2011 4:20 pm

lilymoore says... · Tue Feb 15, 2011 4:20 pm

Memories raining
down on the fresh, upturned earth
you're sleeping under.

Never forget who you are, for surely the world will not. Make it your strength. Then it can never be your weakness. Armor yourself in it, and it will never be used to hurt you.

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