Haiku Battle

Lumi · 2011-02-04T00:28:34Z

Note: This is not in need of reviews as it is not a literary work. This is a game-type activity. Here's a poetry exercise to sharpen our description with as few words as possible. Could that mean Haiku? That's right, folks. We here at the poetry forum are gonna duke it out--not with swords or guns, but with words. Seventeen syllables worth, to be precise. If you're not aware of what a Haiku is, here's a quick note: Haiku is a form of poetry consisting of three lines, respectively measuring 5/7/5 in beats. A Haiku is typically about nature, and more often than not denotes a particular season in which the poem takes place (though it doesn't have to, by any means). They're beautiful things, and, while small, can take masterful lyricists to craft. Senryu are similar, although they deal with more human ideas/emotions/situations. They're my personal favorite. Same format. So this is our battle, poets! The task is simple: merely post a Haiku or Senryu. The major hitch of the exercise is that the first line of your poem must feed off of the last line of the one above yours. The entire poem may be different, but they'll all be connected. One huge Poem Chain. To begin: Downpours in the south make rivers strong as wildfire; April boasts its strength.

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Sat Feb 05, 2011 10:32 pm

Button says... · Sat Feb 05, 2011 10:32 pm

Winds whip the earth,
snuffing Hephaestus as he
danced through ancient trees.

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Sat Feb 05, 2011 11:24 pm

geekchic says... · Sat Feb 05, 2011 11:24 pm

As the moon rises,
We count the minutes that pass
Because we can't sleep.

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Sat Feb 05, 2011 11:51 pm

Button says... · Sat Feb 05, 2011 11:51 pm

Insomnia haunts
us, sadness in the mirror:
bags under our eyes.

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Sun Feb 06, 2011 12:11 am

Jagged says... · Sun Feb 06, 2011 12:11 am

Despair sank her hooks
in the hollows of our spines.
Desire hungers.

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Sun Feb 06, 2011 12:23 am

Button says... · Sun Feb 06, 2011 12:23 am

Misery fell to
her lips, ready to sing sad
stories as she slept.

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Sun Feb 06, 2011 6:03 pm

lilymoore says... · Sun Feb 06, 2011 6:03 pm

Remembering dreams
she hadn't meant to have had
but can't be rid of.

Never forget who you are, for surely the world will not. Make it your strength. Then it can never be your weakness. Armor yourself in it, and it will never be used to hurt you.

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Sun Feb 06, 2011 7:16 pm

Lumi says... · Sun Feb 06, 2011 7:16 pm

Like demons they haunt,
lurking in her darkest thoughts
until the light fades.

I am a forest fire and an ocean, and I will burn you just as much
as I will drown everything you have inside.

-Shinji Moon

I am the property of Rydia, please return me to her ship.

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Sun Feb 06, 2011 7:18 pm

nicolerosebieber says... · Sun Feb 06, 2011 7:18 pm

I liked it,but I think it should be longer and have more detail. otherwise it's GREAT!

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Sun Feb 06, 2011 8:36 pm

Button says... · Sun Feb 06, 2011 8:36 pm

The details were dim,
and the length insufficient;
and yet, it was loved.

(the first two lines lie, I promise!)

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Sun Feb 06, 2011 8:52 pm

geekchic says... · Sun Feb 06, 2011 8:52 pm

Love lasts forever
Or at least that's what they say
What is your excuse?

Books are the ultimate Dumpees: put them down and they'll wait for you forever; pay attention to them and they always love you back.
-John Green (An Abundance of Katherines)

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Sun Feb 06, 2011 9:08 pm

Lumi says... · Sun Feb 06, 2011 9:08 pm

Dear, you missed a test
today; you were in the burn
ward, choking on blood.

I am a forest fire and an ocean, and I will burn you just as much
as I will drown everything you have inside.

-Shinji Moon

I am the property of Rydia, please return me to her ship.

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Sun Feb 06, 2011 9:33 pm

Button says... · Sun Feb 06, 2011 9:33 pm

But don't worry, dear:
if you're still alive, you can
do it tomorrow.

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Sun Feb 06, 2011 11:28 pm

Jagged says... · Sun Feb 06, 2011 11:28 pm

Watch the rising lines,
hear the beeping. The machine
is waiting for you.

Lumi: they stand no chance against the JAG SAFETY BLANKET

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Sun Feb 06, 2011 11:46 pm

Lumi says... · Sun Feb 06, 2011 11:46 pm

This thud is your heart
beating between bated breath,
halting in the night.

I am a forest fire and an ocean, and I will burn you just as much
as I will drown everything you have inside.

-Shinji Moon

I am the property of Rydia, please return me to her ship.

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Mon Feb 07, 2011 2:54 am

lilymoore says... · Mon Feb 07, 2011 2:54 am

There wasn't a thing
I could do to save you dear.
But whimper goodbye.

Never forget who you are, for surely the world will not. Make it your strength. Then it can never be your weakness. Armor yourself in it, and it will never be used to hurt you.

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