Haiku Battle

Lumi · 2011-02-04T00:28:34Z

Note: This is not in need of reviews as it is not a literary work. This is a game-type activity. Here's a poetry exercise to sharpen our description with as few words as possible. Could that mean Haiku? That's right, folks. We here at the poetry forum are gonna duke it out--not with swords or guns, but with words. Seventeen syllables worth, to be precise. If you're not aware of what a Haiku is, here's a quick note: Haiku is a form of poetry consisting of three lines, respectively measuring 5/7/5 in beats. A Haiku is typically about nature, and more often than not denotes a particular season in which the poem takes place (though it doesn't have to, by any means). They're beautiful things, and, while small, can take masterful lyricists to craft. Senryu are similar, although they deal with more human ideas/emotions/situations. They're my personal favorite. Same format. So this is our battle, poets! The task is simple: merely post a Haiku or Senryu. The major hitch of the exercise is that the first line of your poem must feed off of the last line of the one above yours. The entire poem may be different, but they'll all be connected. One huge Poem Chain. To begin: Downpours in the south make rivers strong as wildfire; April boasts its strength.

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Mon Feb 07, 2011 3:20 am

PenguinAttack says... · Mon Feb 07, 2011 3:20 am

Sugarcane sucked sweet
on railroad tracks, my sister
sleepless in the night.

I like you as an enemy, but I love you as a friend.

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Mon Feb 07, 2011 5:10 am

Jagged says... · Mon Feb 07, 2011 5:10 am

On the softest nights
my father spoke not a word,
but merely held on.

Lumi: they stand no chance against the JAG SAFETY BLANKET

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Mon Feb 07, 2011 4:24 pm

Button says... · Mon Feb 07, 2011 4:24 pm

His eyes were dark, as
he thought on what had once been;
we watched quietly.

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Mon Feb 07, 2011 5:50 pm

Lumi says... · Mon Feb 07, 2011 5:50 pm

Not a word was said;
the anticipation grew.
He died on the spot.

I am a forest fire and an ocean, and I will burn you just as much
as I will drown everything you have inside.

-Shinji Moon

I am the property of Rydia, please return me to her ship.

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Mon Feb 07, 2011 5:58 pm

Button says... · Mon Feb 07, 2011 5:58 pm

He passed with love in
his wrinkled face, we did not
mourn, but remembered.

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Mon Feb 07, 2011 6:00 pm

Lumi says... · Mon Feb 07, 2011 6:00 pm

I recall the song
you sang at our wedding:
you sang it off-key.

I am a forest fire and an ocean, and I will burn you just as much
as I will drown everything you have inside.

-Shinji Moon

I am the property of Rydia, please return me to her ship.

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Mon Feb 07, 2011 6:03 pm

Button says... · Mon Feb 07, 2011 6:03 pm

And yet, it was from
the heart: you sought out notes, and
found all the wrong ones.

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Mon Feb 07, 2011 6:05 pm

lilymoore says... · Mon Feb 07, 2011 6:05 pm

Was that an F sharp?
You ended the sonata
with a little smirk.

Never forget who you are, for surely the world will not. Make it your strength. Then it can never be your weakness. Armor yourself in it, and it will never be used to hurt you.

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Mon Feb 07, 2011 6:23 pm

Button says... · Mon Feb 07, 2011 6:23 pm

You sat back down, and
unsure claps sounded hollow;
we watched the bride now.

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Mon Feb 07, 2011 6:40 pm

Lumi says... · Mon Feb 07, 2011 6:40 pm

She slithered on down,
her train sedating the crowd.
What a succubus.

I am a forest fire and an ocean, and I will burn you just as much
as I will drown everything you have inside.

-Shinji Moon

I am the property of Rydia, please return me to her ship.

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Mon Feb 07, 2011 6:47 pm

Button says... · Mon Feb 07, 2011 6:47 pm

Pollutants ate at
the lines of your irises,
and color dimmed out.

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Mon Feb 07, 2011 7:43 pm

Jagged says... · Mon Feb 07, 2011 7:43 pm

The old photographs
lie crumpled and torn, and we
should have let you go.

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Mon Feb 07, 2011 8:12 pm

MeanMrMustard says... · Mon Feb 07, 2011 8:12 pm

Go, emo emo
Emo, so emo, oh emo
Emo, should let go.

(5/8/6, whatever :smt001

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Mon Feb 07, 2011 9:13 pm

Button says... · Mon Feb 07, 2011 9:13 pm

But the process was
not that of intentions, but
rather that of time.

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Wed Feb 09, 2011 4:48 am

lilymoore says... · Wed Feb 09, 2011 4:48 am

Ticking down her life
is a watch wound up enough
to give her one breath.

Never forget who you are, for surely the world will not. Make it your strength. Then it can never be your weakness. Armor yourself in it, and it will never be used to hurt you.

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