Haiku Battle

Lumi · 2011-02-04T00:28:34Z

Note: This is not in need of reviews as it is not a literary work. This is a game-type activity. Here's a poetry exercise to sharpen our description with as few words as possible. Could that mean Haiku? That's right, folks. We here at the poetry forum are gonna duke it out--not with swords or guns, but with words. Seventeen syllables worth, to be precise. If you're not aware of what a Haiku is, here's a quick note: Haiku is a form of poetry consisting of three lines, respectively measuring 5/7/5 in beats. A Haiku is typically about nature, and more often than not denotes a particular season in which the poem takes place (though it doesn't have to, by any means). They're beautiful things, and, while small, can take masterful lyricists to craft. Senryu are similar, although they deal with more human ideas/emotions/situations. They're my personal favorite. Same format. So this is our battle, poets! The task is simple: merely post a Haiku or Senryu. The major hitch of the exercise is that the first line of your poem must feed off of the last line of the one above yours. The entire poem may be different, but they'll all be connected. One huge Poem Chain. To begin: Downpours in the south make rivers strong as wildfire; April boasts its strength.

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Wed Feb 09, 2011 5:07 am

OptimismUnderRain says... · Wed Feb 09, 2011 5:07 am

What is the reason
we live our lives like we do;
We die with question.

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Wed Feb 09, 2011 5:09 am

Jagged says... · Wed Feb 09, 2011 5:09 am

I apologize
for not asking where you were.
The phone rings, and rings.

Lumi: they stand no chance against the JAG SAFETY BLANKET

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Wed Feb 09, 2011 1:11 pm

lilymoore says... · Wed Feb 09, 2011 1:11 pm

Please - won't you stop to
play ring around the rosey
unicorn dreamer.

Never forget who you are, for surely the world will not. Make it your strength. Then it can never be your weakness. Armor yourself in it, and it will never be used to hurt you.

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Wed Feb 09, 2011 3:03 pm

Lumi says... · Wed Feb 09, 2011 3:03 pm

In space age limbo
we await the last verneshot.
Go to the bunker.

I am a forest fire and an ocean, and I will burn you just as much
as I will drown everything you have inside.

-Shinji Moon

I am the property of Rydia, please return me to her ship.

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Wed Feb 09, 2011 3:36 pm

Button says... · Wed Feb 09, 2011 3:36 pm

Get to the choppa!
It was yelled through all the trees,
last attempt for life.

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Wed Feb 09, 2011 3:37 pm

Lumi says... · Wed Feb 09, 2011 3:37 pm

The gunfire resounds,
terrifying young children.
This is our war game.

I am a forest fire and an ocean, and I will burn you just as much
as I will drown everything you have inside.

-Shinji Moon

I am the property of Rydia, please return me to her ship.

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Wed Feb 09, 2011 3:50 pm

Button says... · Wed Feb 09, 2011 3:50 pm

Tears mix with blood like
the grounds were mortar and
pestle; pain ensues.

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Wed Feb 09, 2011 8:42 pm

lilymoore says... · Wed Feb 09, 2011 8:42 pm

Sharp and numerous
the needles break her white flesh
and burn her youth away.

Never forget who you are, for surely the world will not. Make it your strength. Then it can never be your weakness. Armor yourself in it, and it will never be used to hurt you.

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Thu Feb 10, 2011 4:03 am

Jagged says... · Thu Feb 10, 2011 4:03 am

They call for witch-hunt.
What do they know, of the night's
dim calls and murmurs?

Lumi: they stand no chance against the JAG SAFETY BLANKET

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Thu Feb 10, 2011 4:50 am

MeanMrMustard says... · Thu Feb 10, 2011 4:50 am

Thunder crackling
Batons unleashed, justice;
The weak, the meek die.

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Thu Feb 10, 2011 6:06 am

Button says... · Thu Feb 10, 2011 6:06 am

But how can it be
called justice, when no true crimes
have been committed?

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Thu Feb 10, 2011 8:42 am

earendil says... · Thu Feb 10, 2011 8:42 am

false accusations;
the console of the mind's eye
is malfunctioning.

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Thu Feb 10, 2011 9:58 am

Jagged says... · Thu Feb 10, 2011 9:58 am

The gears creak and groan
and the engine is rumbling.
We can't stop it now.

Lumi: they stand no chance against the JAG SAFETY BLANKET

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Thu Feb 10, 2011 12:15 pm

geekchic says... · Thu Feb 10, 2011 12:15 pm

We drove for miles
To get to get to an unknown place
But the engine stalled.

Books are the ultimate Dumpees: put them down and they'll wait for you forever; pay attention to them and they always love you back.
-John Green (An Abundance of Katherines)

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Thu Feb 10, 2011 2:09 pm

Button says... · Thu Feb 10, 2011 2:09 pm

Our thumbs ached, stretched out
as bloody feet dragged on the
road; we searched for home.

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