Haiku Battle

Lumi · 2011-02-04T00:28:34Z

Note: This is not in need of reviews as it is not a literary work. This is a game-type activity. Here's a poetry exercise to sharpen our description with as few words as possible. Could that mean Haiku? That's right, folks. We here at the poetry forum are gonna duke it out--not with swords or guns, but with words. Seventeen syllables worth, to be precise. If you're not aware of what a Haiku is, here's a quick note: Haiku is a form of poetry consisting of three lines, respectively measuring 5/7/5 in beats. A Haiku is typically about nature, and more often than not denotes a particular season in which the poem takes place (though it doesn't have to, by any means). They're beautiful things, and, while small, can take masterful lyricists to craft. Senryu are similar, although they deal with more human ideas/emotions/situations. They're my personal favorite. Same format. So this is our battle, poets! The task is simple: merely post a Haiku or Senryu. The major hitch of the exercise is that the first line of your poem must feed off of the last line of the one above yours. The entire poem may be different, but they'll all be connected. One huge Poem Chain. To begin: Downpours in the south make rivers strong as wildfire; April boasts its strength.

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Thu Jan 10, 2013 1:29 pm

PenguinAttack says... · Thu Jan 10, 2013 1:29 pm

I am bad at this,
how syllables slide toward
your cloudless skies now.

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Thu Jan 10, 2013 1:40 pm

noninjaes says... · Thu Jan 10, 2013 1:40 pm

And the suns shines bright,
raining liquid summer warmth.
Forty degree days.

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Thu Jan 10, 2013 6:45 pm

Lumi says... · Thu Jan 10, 2013 6:45 pm

High temps fluctuate,
cover the green blades with gold:
a dream in winter.

I am a forest fire and an ocean, and I will burn you just as much
as I will drown everything you have inside.

-Shinji Moon

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Thu Jan 10, 2013 7:15 pm

FermentingFruit says... · Thu Jan 10, 2013 7:15 pm

Writing a Haiku
Forgetting syllable count
What was I doing?

Save time... see it my way.

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Thu Jan 10, 2013 8:25 pm

Sparkle says... · Thu Jan 10, 2013 8:25 pm

I can't remember
the innocence of flowers.
Midwinter morning.

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Thu Jan 10, 2013 9:12 pm

AlfredSymon says... · Thu Jan 10, 2013 9:12 pm

And her grace, so light,
sidled by the manly lot,
holding sword and shield

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Fri Jan 11, 2013 3:00 am

PenguinAttack says... · Fri Jan 11, 2013 3:00 am

Gum boughs slink lower
as skies raise red and ash hot
our breath will refresh.

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Fri Jan 11, 2013 3:22 am

Lumi says... · Fri Jan 11, 2013 3:22 am

The birds observe us,
two machines lying in tar.
Can they see our eyes?

I am a forest fire and an ocean, and I will burn you just as much
as I will drown everything you have inside.

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Sun Jan 13, 2013 7:55 pm

Karzkin says... · Sun Jan 13, 2013 7:55 pm

There are no eyes here,
here in Death's Other Kingdom;
Mistah Kurtz - he dead.

Do not go gentle into that good night.
Rage, rage against the dying of the light.

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Wed Jan 16, 2013 6:06 am

AlfredSymon says... · Wed Jan 16, 2013 6:06 am

Live, never can we,
for wind will stop and earth...shake!
Pawns are we to death

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Wed Jan 16, 2013 2:04 pm

PenguinAttack says... · Wed Jan 16, 2013 2:04 pm

The mouth of the earth;
forever speaking to me
in so many tongues.

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Thu Jan 17, 2013 11:32 am

AlfredSymon says... · Thu Jan 17, 2013 11:32 am

Grassy tentacles
wrapped 'round my shriveling heart
and returned greenness.

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Fri Jan 18, 2013 1:42 pm

PenguinAttack says... · Fri Jan 18, 2013 1:42 pm

Taste the drying ash
settled on your tongue, again
reincarnation.

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Fri Jan 25, 2013 4:39 am

yubbies21 says... · Fri Jan 25, 2013 4:39 am

new heart, full of life
smooth skin and perfect features,
wrought anew this day.

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Sun Feb 03, 2013 2:02 pm

AlfredSymon says... · Sun Feb 03, 2013 2:02 pm

Count the syllables,
found anything wrong with them?
Maybe you would.

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