Haiku Battle

Lumi · 2011-02-04T00:28:34Z

Note: This is not in need of reviews as it is not a literary work. This is a game-type activity. Here's a poetry exercise to sharpen our description with as few words as possible. Could that mean Haiku? That's right, folks. We here at the poetry forum are gonna duke it out--not with swords or guns, but with words. Seventeen syllables worth, to be precise. If you're not aware of what a Haiku is, here's a quick note: Haiku is a form of poetry consisting of three lines, respectively measuring 5/7/5 in beats. A Haiku is typically about nature, and more often than not denotes a particular season in which the poem takes place (though it doesn't have to, by any means). They're beautiful things, and, while small, can take masterful lyricists to craft. Senryu are similar, although they deal with more human ideas/emotions/situations. They're my personal favorite. Same format. So this is our battle, poets! The task is simple: merely post a Haiku or Senryu. The major hitch of the exercise is that the first line of your poem must feed off of the last line of the one above yours. The entire poem may be different, but they'll all be connected. One huge Poem Chain. To begin: Downpours in the south make rivers strong as wildfire; April boasts its strength.

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Thu May 12, 2011 6:45 pm

EtCetera says... · Thu May 12, 2011 6:45 pm

This blade in my hand
Heartless, ruthless, merciless
Does what I can't do

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Thu May 12, 2011 6:48 pm

Jas says... · Thu May 12, 2011 6:48 pm

I can't write haikus.
Tried to get inspiration
Such epic failure.

I am nothing
but a mouthful of 'sorry's, half-hearted
apologies that roll of my tongue, smoothquick, like 'r's
or maybe like pocket candy
that's just a bit too sweet.

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Thu May 12, 2011 6:50 pm

Lava says... · Thu May 12, 2011 6:50 pm

I am trap'd in these
arms - heavy, leaden and mine.
I wish to break free.

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Pretending in words was too tentative, too vulnerable, too embarrassing to let anyone know.
- Ian McEwan in Atonement

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Fri May 13, 2011 2:46 am

mellophone7 says... · Fri May 13, 2011 2:46 am

Trapped in the darkness,
I am longing for a light.
Will you provide it?

"The difficulty of literature is not to write, but to write what you mean." -Robert Louis Stevenson
"Write or die trying."
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Mon May 16, 2011 7:11 pm

EtCetera says... · Mon May 16, 2011 7:11 pm

Soldier of shadows
I run in the thick darkness
Saving the lost light.

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Tue May 17, 2011 3:36 am

Lumi says... · Tue May 17, 2011 3:36 am

Paths of cobblestone
trail through the night like souls;
Minecraft is my God.

I am a forest fire and an ocean, and I will burn you just as much
as I will drown everything you have inside.

-Shinji Moon

I am the property of Rydia, please return me to her ship.

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Tue May 17, 2011 3:44 am

mellophone7 says... · Tue May 17, 2011 3:44 am

I follow this path
unsure of where it will end
taking the journey

"The difficulty of literature is not to write, but to write what you mean." -Robert Louis Stevenson
"Write or die trying."
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Mon May 23, 2011 7:56 am

senseiawesome says... · Mon May 23, 2011 7:56 am

Just take my damned heart
Crush my future, my dreams
My so called "best friend"

'This could possibly be the best day ever, but the forecast says that tomorrow will likely be a million and six times better.'

Today is Gonna Be a Great Day, Bowling for Soup

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Sun May 29, 2011 7:09 am

Karzkin says... · Sun May 29, 2011 7:09 am

I gave you my heart.
You gave me a gun, and just
A single bullet.

Do not go gentle into that good night.
Rage, rage against the dying of the light.

K's Killa Kritiques

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Sun Jun 05, 2011 3:51 pm

zone says... · Sun Jun 05, 2011 3:51 pm

It spreads like blood
infusing its perfect shade
out across the sky

Dreams come in waves
to take us home
Daylight stitches our eyes open
and we flicker on
-Eyes stitched open:The Telegraphs

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Wed Jun 22, 2011 1:34 am

322sivart says... · Wed Jun 22, 2011 1:34 am

Darkness or light? Niether.
Bright red, full of doubt in mind
Makes the children run

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Fri Jun 24, 2011 7:07 pm

Alpha says... · Fri Jun 24, 2011 7:07 pm

Colorful sunsets,
Brilliant hues of lavender
Greet the moony night.

Note: money isn't a word. I just made it up.
(Hey, I do have poetic licence, right?)

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Sat Jun 25, 2011 5:53 pm

mellophone7 says... · Sat Jun 25, 2011 5:53 pm

This brilliant moon
glows in the sky but will run
when touched by sunshine.

"The difficulty of literature is not to write, but to write what you mean." -Robert Louis Stevenson
"Write or die trying."
JA hatar pisanje.

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