You died, tonight.

Hello! This was good. It was serious, heart-felt and emotion with a nice humorous touch at the end. It was very well written. Great job.

*sniffles*
Beautiful.


--Bunny

I definetly liked this thoufgh it was funny and the end is unexpected

I love this xD i really do, it made me laugh at the end, but i really liked it!
It was emotional all the way through, I was expecting a big emotional finale, but i think what i got was much better!
good piece, keep writing!

Wow! Lol! This was a fun read, thanks giving me a laugh!


-lilgreendots <3

I have to say it is very emotional, and the fact you were talking about your internet connection. I was not expecting that.

Wow...I really love it! You haven't gone for that lovey-dovey mood and this shows your true feelings, which spoke to me! I love it! Its totally awesome dude!

I really enjoyed this! i was expecting some angsty poem leading up to some a-hole boyfriend with black eyeliner.... and then it was the internet connection. having had a rather unstable one i appreciate and understand the emotion behind this.

this also reminds me of a poem i heard from a classmate back when i was in highschool. it was very sexual, all about chewing gum... but it sounds like something else that was moist and pink. it was awesome.
not only is the change humorous but makes the whole subject (in the gum aspect) less awkard.

i could probably search and find a deeper meaning to each line, but i like it the way it is, obvious.

I love the ending and I agree 110% I think though, that you shouldn't use expletives. You could have found a better alternative to the line; "you worthless piece of shit." Other than that I liked it, it was nice how you used a stereotypical romance break up in the beginning and then went to "internet connection" rotfl <3

Oh wow, that was genius! I thought it was another whiner about relationships, but then at the end. . .
Well, there's no need to say why it's so funny. You already know that.
Good job!
~Crazy

Haha, I loved the first two lines. Great passion in that. Not so much the following two; they sounded, to me, a bit weaker "You made me...you made me..." I would change those words.

Most of what I loved about the poem was its surprise ending. Creative. Doesn't stray down the road many choose to go.

I'm going to be completely honest here, I clicked when it was in new works, thought "CLICHE LOVE POEM" and left you to the reviewing wolves which have longer attention spans than I. Then everyone began liking it. I came here to see what all the excitement was about.

Now, I must say - the ending reached out and touched my soul. It was just so perfect the way I can relate to the horrible, deceiving Internet connection which tears at the core of our very being.

(Translation: I laughed so hard you made my sore throat more sore. Thank you.)

Haha I love it, definatly what I think every time the internet stops working.

It was different from any kind of poetry I've read before but I liked it a lot! Good work!

Again, thank you for your comments.

Tanya