Haha! Very clever. My first impression was something along the lines of "damn.. harsh." Once I got around to the end, though, I immediately recalled numerous times where I had the urge to punch my computer in the face (because you can't punch an internet connection, apparently). I bet you'd turn out to be a great poet if you continued. Got a laugh out of me, at least. Good write.
Hahahaha... That was epic. Nice job. I agree with some of the other reviewers, the end isn't as expected, but it works out oh so wonderfully! It made me laugh so hard. Sure, it doesn't flow so great, but it works out in the end. And it was just 'cuz, too, so it's all cool. Again, nice poem. =]
Good poem, excellent twist. I can honestly say I did not see that one coming, even if I may have felt the same way about my Internet connection before. Onto the pretentious review:
There was excellent use of emotion in this piece, I could really feel the raw frustration and anger behind the words. I definitely can sympathize with you in this situation.
"Never be bullied into silence. Never allow yourself to be made a victim. Accept no one's definition of your life; define yourself." ~Harvey Fierstein
This is a really good and very funny actually. Did this really happen? If it did i might have to lauph. there werent a lot of errors. actually there werent any. so really this deserved to get on the most popular list. you totally deserved it. anyway keep writing because your on my reading list. so just write write write write write write write! please.
your just very good at writing. you have a very fluent writing style and i need to look at your other posts.
wait too late my moms telling me to get off the computer by.
Nella vita vi è la distruzione, desolazione nella morte, ma c'è speranza nella rivoluzione.
I agree with cupcake. It is good and the ending shocked me. I like it, and I've gone through the same thing so this poem relates to my past which makes me like it even more.
Oh wow! That was actually funny at the end. I thought it was about some guy (as did my sister) and yet it was about the internet. Way to show love for the connection. That was awesome.
Life is what's left when everything is taken from you.
I liked this a lot. It was fun to read and the ending was entertaining. I love the rhythm and how it made me laugh. It was really easy to read and I can't wait to see what else you come up with. Just wow. Good job.
Very well; I hear; I admit, but I have a voice too, and for good or evil mine is the speech that cannot be silenced. — Joseph Conrad, Heart of Darkness
Got a laugh out of me, at least. Good write.
