LOL!!!!!!!!! I was thinking, wow, 60-something reviews, this has got to be good. Then I was like - it's about someone who died ... that isn't very nice ... Then I read the last line, and I fell out of my chair laughing. It really flows and is hilarious. After I'd read it once I went back and read it again, and caught all the clues I'd missed, which made it doubly hilarious. Really great job, Tanya! Nothing I can advise, really, it was brilliant. I think we can all relate to you!! - Ignis
The POTATO of DOOM
A thousand times it calls your name A thousand times you hear it And fools are those who heed its call But fools are those who fear it.
You should have this poem framed. 108 reviews and well over a 1000 views, and well deserved. A legitimately funny, ironic work of lol. For kicks, send this to poetry contests. Ok, maybe not, but I would. : )
edit: SCRATCH THAT, send it to your internet provider.
hahah it was a verry sly ending, if you dontmind me saying, the first part,ifyou carryed it on, it could have been a beautiful and sad poem full of heart, but i gessit was verry uique
HAHAHA I thought I was in for a sombre poem but that last line had me laughing I could rant about the way it flowed etc but really it was just for fun and I think that there's no need to heavily critique that. I also laugh because my internet connection hates me with a fiery passion that burns with the heat of a thousand suns!!!!! ... where was I? Oh, right, your poem Clever and amusing it lightened me up
hahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahaha! that's funny. this was really good. i think it's good how you didn't make it flow, but if you did it might have made us think it was more a real person you loved. don't say you think it's worthless and then say you love it. that's confusing. also, good how you didn't say what it was until the end. but, swearing is kind of distracting. i dunno. maybe you did it to make it sound like you really hated it. but if it was a person and they died, you would say you loved them, and not that they're worthless after they die. just saying. well, i think you were aiming for us to think it was a person and then, shocker, it's the internet. but, sorry to say i guessed it wasn't a person just because it wasn't very poetic and you did the love it, hate it thing. but i was laughing outloud after i read it. so, good job! i really liked it. thanks! -Cammie
"All our dreams can come true, if we have the courage to persue them" -Walt Disney
oh one more thing. the title is weird. capatilize it and take out the comma. unless of course you did that on purpose like e.e. cummings or something. but anyway the title is good, because it fits the poem, but just capatilize and take out the comma. that's all. bye! -Cammie
"All our dreams can come true, if we have the courage to persue them" -Walt Disney
