Reviews by Carlito :)

Carlito · 2009-06-15T01:24:34Z

CLOSED FOR NOW Let's just cut right to the chase.... Favorite things to review: -Romance (Novels and short stories) -Action/Adventure (Novels and short stories) -General Fiction (Novels and short stories) -Lyrics What I won't review: -Fantasy -Sci-Fi Anything else I'll give a shot but no guarantees it'll be good :) For novels: 1. No more than two chapters at a time. 2. If you want me to review select chapters, not the whole thing, give me a brief synopsis of what's going on. For everything else: 1. Links are great, but if you don't provide a link tell me the exact name of what you want me to review so I can find it in your portfolio. Don't just say "please review my story" 2. No more than two requests at a time. Once I finish those, you can ask for more if you feel the need. Generally here's how my reviews go. I go through and quote things that I don't like and get real nit-picky and try to explain how to fix it. Then I give my general impression on characters, plot, and your overall writing. For lyrics it's sort of the same. I go through and nitpick things and then give my overall impression of the rhyme/rhythm, and song as a whole. I may be kind of harsh. Any questions, feel free to ask! Thanks much :) -Carly

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Sun Jul 12, 2009 5:33 pm

pinkangel54123 says... · Sun Jul 12, 2009 5:33 pm

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I would be oh so very happy if you reviewed!

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Mon Jul 13, 2009 12:07 am

Carlito says... · Mon Jul 13, 2009 12:07 am

D'accord Mme,

J'ai fait ca.

Basically, that just means I did it

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Sat Jul 18, 2009 2:37 am

Carlito says... · Sat Jul 18, 2009 2:37 am

I've still got a lot of free time to fill.

It does not do to dwell on dreams and forget to live.

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Wed Jul 22, 2009 3:34 pm

wookielover17 says... · Wed Jul 22, 2009 3:34 pm

I'd be happy to help you fill up your free time. And besides, I could use some reviews. If it's okay with you. My story is:

Name: Learning the Truth
Genre: Other Fiction

Try not to be to harsh, if that's okay. Okay then. Bye!!!!

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Thu Jul 23, 2009 2:22 am

Carlito says... · Thu Jul 23, 2009 2:22 am

Did you want me to review the whole thing or just a couple of chapters? Either way is fine, I don't really mind.

-Carly

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Fri Jul 24, 2009 4:59 am

Jamie_rocks says... · Fri Jul 24, 2009 4:59 am

Hi! I'm looking for a review on this, it's the third chapter in a supernatural novel I'm working on called "The Love Note." I'm not really looking for any more input on the earlier chapters, but you may want to skim through them if you want to understand what's going on. Otherwise I won't mind if you just give me an overall nitpick of this chapter. Please feel free to be as harsh as you are able.

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Sun Jul 26, 2009 5:24 pm

Carlito says... · Sun Jul 26, 2009 5:24 pm

I did the first three chapters of your story Wookie, I'll do more if you want me to.

Jamie, I've read the first two chapters, your review is coming.

-Carly

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Sun Jul 26, 2009 5:49 pm

Angels-Symphony says... · Sun Jul 26, 2009 5:49 pm

Hey Carly ^^ Shina here to request a review

http://www.youngwriterssociety.com/post585091.html#585091

It's called Cinnamon Rolls on Tuesday, Part I. It's an other fiction short story, but I'm going to repost it when it's all complete and whole.

Thanks ^^

-Shina

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Sun Jul 26, 2009 11:58 pm

Carlito says... · Sun Jul 26, 2009 11:58 pm

Jamie, your review is done.

Shina, your review is coming.

-Carly

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Mon Jul 27, 2009 12:07 am

pinkangel54123 says... · Mon Jul 27, 2009 12:07 am

Could you review Luna 2 if you are so inclined since you reviewed Luna 1 for me?

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Mon Aug 03, 2009 5:05 pm

Carlito says... · Mon Aug 03, 2009 5:05 pm

Shina yours is finally finished

pinkangel, yours is coming

-Carly

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Thu Aug 06, 2009 4:24 pm

Carlito says... · Thu Aug 06, 2009 4:24 pm

Finished your review pinkangel

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Fri Aug 07, 2009 5:43 pm

Pretty Crazy says... · Fri Aug 07, 2009 5:43 pm

Could you please do a review on my story? I want lots of different people to review it, so I can have lots of opinions.

It's called "Mission Zero"
And it's under action/adventure fiction.
Let me know if you like it.
Thanks. ^_^

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Sun Aug 23, 2009 4:30 pm

Carlito says... · Sun Aug 23, 2009 4:30 pm

Finished Pretty Crazy

((OMG! 1000 posts!!! :elephant:

(I've never used that one before but it seems like a good time to start)

))

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Fri Aug 28, 2009 2:15 am

Carlito says... · Fri Aug 28, 2009 2:15 am

I've still got free time to kill even though school has started. *bangs head into wall*

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