Haiku Train

BarrettBenedict · 2009-04-26T07:14:14Z

This is pretty simple and can be lots of fun. The premise is you take the last line of the haiku before yours and make it the first as yours. It doesn't necessarily have to be the exact line either. If you can cleverly change it in subtle ways so that it rhymes or sounds the same that is also cool. Example: This is a haiku five, seven, five syllables would be the format ... could be a doormat were it not for the large head must be tiger's skin etc. So here's a starter haiku: old film reels rotate monochrome images of what dogs imagine

Buranko

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Sat Mar 12, 2022 10:21 pm

Buranko says... · Sat Mar 12, 2022 10:21 pm

like lion, like lamb,
the friendly gazes of a
desperate sunset

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Sat Mar 12, 2022 11:37 pm

alliyah says... · Sat Mar 12, 2022 11:37 pm

desperate sunset
always reaching, just beyond
the drowning skyline

you should know i am a time traveler &
there is no season as achingly temporary as now

but i have promised to return

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Starve

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Mon Mar 14, 2022 11:55 am

Starve says... · Mon Mar 14, 2022 11:55 am

the drowning skyline
avoids crumbling on itself
neon fights with black

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Mon Mar 14, 2022 2:06 pm

Hijinks says... · Mon Mar 14, 2022 2:06 pm

neon fights with black;
a flickering sign struggles
to be read at night

When you're faced with something you don't understand, I think the most natural thing but also least interesting thing you can be is afraid.

-- Hank Green

they/them
(previously whatchamacallit and Seirre)

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Mon Mar 14, 2022 9:45 pm

Plume says... · Mon Mar 14, 2022 9:45 pm

"to be read at night"
post-it on piles of prose;
my bedside table.

I was born to speak all mirth and no matter.

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Stellarjay

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Tue Mar 15, 2022 12:24 am

Stellarjay says... · Tue Mar 15, 2022 12:24 am

my bedside table
feel the wood grain, flip the switch
warm light flooding

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Tue Mar 15, 2022 6:33 pm

deleted48 says... · Tue Mar 15, 2022 6:33 pm

the warm light flooding
through overhead lights; we are
not yet forgiven.

In a shadow there is the blessing of a shadow.
— Kuki Shūzō

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alliyah

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Tue Mar 15, 2022 8:22 pm

alliyah says... · Tue Mar 15, 2022 8:22 pm

not yet forgiven,
hands still holding anchors tight
and trying to swim

you should know i am a time traveler &
there is no season as achingly temporary as now

but i have promised to return

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Buranko

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Thu Mar 17, 2022 7:11 am

Buranko says... · Thu Mar 17, 2022 7:11 am

and trying to swim
is the proper way to write
southern poetry.

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Hkumar

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Sat Mar 19, 2022 3:40 pm

Hkumar says... · Sat Mar 19, 2022 3:40 pm

southern poetry
travelled far across ocean
folktales kept alive

I only put my signature on big cheques.

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Sat Mar 19, 2022 4:56 pm

alliyah says... · Sat Mar 19, 2022 4:56 pm

folktales kept alive
with a thread of truth and lie
mingled in magic

you should know i am a time traveler &
there is no season as achingly temporary as now

but i have promised to return

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TheRebel2007

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Sat Mar 19, 2022 5:09 pm

TheRebel2007 says... · Sat Mar 19, 2022 5:09 pm

mingled in magic
are troublesome medieval
monologues in time

Yes, to dance beneath the diamond skies with one hand waving free,
Silhouetted by the trees, circled by the circus sands --
With all memories and fate, driven deep beneath the waves,
Let me forget about today until tomorrow...

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