Haiku Train

BarrettBenedict · 2009-04-26T07:14:14Z

This is pretty simple and can be lots of fun. The premise is you take the last line of the haiku before yours and make it the first as yours. It doesn't necessarily have to be the exact line either. If you can cleverly change it in subtle ways so that it rhymes or sounds the same that is also cool. Example: This is a haiku five, seven, five syllables would be the format ... could be a doormat were it not for the large head must be tiger's skin etc. So here's a starter haiku: old film reels rotate monochrome images of what dogs imagine

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Tue Feb 08, 2022 1:27 pm

Plume says... · Tue Feb 08, 2022 1:27 pm

beauty of the sea
she swims, tail twisting with grace.
with sunrise comes songs

I was born to speak all mirth and no matter.

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Starve

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Tue Feb 08, 2022 1:39 pm

Starve says... · Tue Feb 08, 2022 1:39 pm

with sunrise come songs
harmonies felt in the bones
sung without a sound

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Tue Feb 08, 2022 2:07 pm

fatherfig says... · Tue Feb 08, 2022 2:07 pm

sung without a sound
still windchimes beneath oak trees
humming wings stir leaves

[insert inspirational quote here]

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Tue Feb 08, 2022 8:32 pm

alliyah says... · Tue Feb 08, 2022 8:32 pm

humming wings stir leaves
like new rippling water waves
creation breathing

you should know i am a time traveler &
there is no season as achingly temporary as now

but i have promised to return

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Tue Feb 08, 2022 11:39 pm

Hijinks says... · Tue Feb 08, 2022 11:39 pm

i create my breath:
in and out like my lungs sew
calm into the air.

When you're faced with something you don't understand, I think the most natural thing but also least interesting thing you can be is afraid.

-- Hank Green

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Thu Feb 10, 2022 11:32 pm

alliyah says... · Thu Feb 10, 2022 11:32 pm

fresh air gives me calm
when the noise shakes my resolve
one step at a time

you should know i am a time traveler &
there is no season as achingly temporary as now

but i have promised to return

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Thu Feb 10, 2022 11:48 pm

Plume says... · Thu Feb 10, 2022 11:48 pm

one step at a time!
baby grins, arms outstretched, but then,
faceplants in the snow.

I was born to speak all mirth and no matter.

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Starve

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Fri Feb 11, 2022 4:29 am

Starve says... · Fri Feb 11, 2022 4:29 am

faceplants in the snow
pace slants in the snow, flailing
I cannot get up

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Sat Feb 12, 2022 5:01 pm

ayelenwritesstuff says... · Sat Feb 12, 2022 5:01 pm

I cannot get up
I am so tired, sleepy
the sheets hug me tight

ok byeee[color=#FF8080][/color]

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Sat Feb 12, 2022 6:04 pm

Hijinks says... · Sat Feb 12, 2022 6:04 pm

the sheets hug me tight.
i snuggle deeper, as i
wait for the alarm.

When you're faced with something you don't understand, I think the most natural thing but also least interesting thing you can be is afraid.

-- Hank Green

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Sat Feb 12, 2022 6:07 pm

alliyah says... · Sat Feb 12, 2022 6:07 pm

wait for the alarm.
rooster hushes chicks, then crows
COCKADOODLEDOO!!

you should know i am a time traveler &
there is no season as achingly temporary as now

but i have promised to return

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Starve

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Sun Feb 13, 2022 4:59 pm

Starve says... · Sun Feb 13, 2022 4:59 pm

chicken to the moon

cock a doodle, do
not uncock the doodle please
it's ready for launch

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Tue Feb 15, 2022 4:51 am

Silvern says... · Tue Feb 15, 2022 4:51 am

it’s ready for launch:
my heart written on paper,
folded as a plane

Democracy dies in darkness. Also at 4:30PM in Pacific Standard Time, apparently.

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Hijinks

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Fri Feb 18, 2022 5:00 pm

Hijinks says... · Fri Feb 18, 2022 5:00 pm

folded like a plain
serviette: a thing to be
used and washed and used.

When you're faced with something you don't understand, I think the most natural thing but also least interesting thing you can be is afraid.

-- Hank Green

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Hkumar

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Fri Feb 18, 2022 6:21 pm

Hkumar says... · Fri Feb 18, 2022 6:21 pm

used and washed and used
until the last of thread crumbled
still I could feel you

I only put my signature on big cheques.

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