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Quin rolled her eyes. Making Sarjen a Jounin was one thing, but actually giving him a squad, what was the Hokage thinking. She glared up at the two. She then looked at her at Kita. She had a lot of work to do if she was going to make him into a ninja, and she hadn't even met the rest of her squad.
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Yahiko Made it to the training field a little late. Apparently there had been some kind of a mix-up and he went to the wrong place. When he got there he recognized Koka from class and watched as a man harassed him. he hoped he wasn't their sensei, but some how he knew it to be true. As he walked up the man smiled, "And you are?"

"Moujin Yahiko sir."

"Yahiko hmm, nice to meet ya." The man patted him on the back and he traded glances with Koka, this was going to be a long day.
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Denrei

Having finished his bowl of ramen, Denrei was now running full tilt towards the training grounds. Late he may have been, but he was determined to ensure that he wouldn’t be so late that whichever jounin he had been assigned to would be furious with him. He channelled his chakra into his feet and sprinted even faster, reaching the training grounds bare minutes late.

He skidded to a halt and searched around. No one seemed to be on training ground nine. What’s going on? He thought, Where is everyone? There were, however, people on one of the training grounds near him, so he made his way to them.

“Excuse me, sensei, where is sensei Sarjen?"

The woman gave him an incredulous look, then, pointed up at a tree. She then turned her back on him, muttering, “I almost feel sorry for you. Almost.”
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*Okay, squad four is now Suika, Usiko and Akira.*

Squad Four~
Suika opened her one eye, which was now covered by her goggles. Koka had slipped down the bark of the tree, and was now watching Suika do her yoga with his eyebrow raised inquisitvely. "Nervous?" He asked, amused. "Does that stuff actually calm you down?"

Suika not so much as nodded her head before Koka continued. "Yoga seems so perverted. I'd die of embarassment if anyone saw me!"

Suika shrugged, and pulled herself into a balanced position, where she calmly replied. "What? Am I just your entertainment? Something to occupy your mind since that your head is out of a book?" Suika said. "Besides. It's good for core muscles. Us girls like to look good as well!"

Suika opened her eyes when she heard a slight rustle in the grass. There sitting in a tree was Kita Uzumaki, and coming into the training ground was his brother, Usiko. They had spiked hair like their father's, his bright blue eyes, but hair black as a raven's feather's like their mother, Hinata.

Suika gave a warm nod and smile to them both. She'd always liked egging the two on during classes. Being twins, as they were, it was funny seeing them quarrel before class started. It always lightened Suika's mood.

Usiko went over and rested below the tree where his brother was sitting. He pulled out a water balloon, trying to make it pop with his chakra. It never did. Suika turned back and-- before she closed her eyes-- saw a figure moving along on the horizon.

The new sensei. He called the students forward. Suika stood as straight and tall as she could. She was rather tall for her age. As tall as a boy! The sensei sent Koka and Kita off, and replacing them would be Akira. Another student she knew, but not rather well.

"Here's what you must do. You guys must get these bells from me, before sun's set, and if you fail you will be strep of your rank." Mando said.
"You mean we'll be sent back to the academy?" Akira asked.
"No, i mean you will never be ninjas," Mando said. The other two gulped looking afraid, but usiko was not. His father told him this and he knew how to do it.


Suika knew failiure from the start. Her jutsu weren't exceptional... but she was agile. That's why she was so good at yoga. She was flexible. That's why she had gotten the weapon she had. Because she could move quick. But Mando Sensei was a jounin. Would she last?

She took a glance at Akira and Usiko. Akira looked a little perturbed, but Usiko looked confident. He had a shining smile plastered on his face. "You aren't nervous, are you?" Suika asked with a michevious smile on her face. Yes. If Usiko knew how to do this, than maybe if she stuck to his side she could get the bell on her own....
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*Uh... I'm not really sure where anyone one is right now, so I'll just try to jump in somewhere.*

[Aro Tokaya - Squad 6]

"Buh-bye!" I called out, grinning.

My dad gave a quick nod and retreated back into the doorway. I swivled around and darted through the people towards a training ground. As I got farther away from my house it soon became small enough that I was sure neither of my parents could be able to see me, I slowed to a stop. And took out a piece of gum.

I felt like I could run up a wall.

"Training ground, here I come!" I shouted out.

People looked at me with odd expressions, but I hardly noticed any of them. They were all blurs of colors that seemed to be moving out of my way. I took a left turn into an ally and jumped over a fence, then took a right.

A wide, open field stood out in front and there was already two people there. A woman and a boy who was... on a tree? I blew a bubble as my feet skidded to a stop in the grass, looking over the two.
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Qin now saw that she had two of her squad members, but where was the last. She sighed. Why was she given the complicated team.
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Usiko saw that Suika was wondering why he not nervous. 'tell you why in a bit he said and as soon as the new sensei blew his whistle he took off into the undergrowth. He was soon joined by Suika and near him was Akira.
"why am i so confident, because unlike everyone else who has taken this test i know the answer the mentor wants." Usiko said as he started to make a few hand signs slowly.
"and whats that' Suika asked
"it is teamwork, i know it may sound dumb, but my dad took this test and his sensie's did, it was made by the 3rd to teach the sages, and it was made to get the team to work together"
"so, we just have to work together"
"yep, thats it, other then that we just attack him, and i got a few ideas for that"
he said and then suddenly a shield appeared around him, then he made a shadow clone next to him. "okay so here is the plan, i send this guy in to the front line, while i runaround the back, i will then release this and blind the enemy, that's when you grab the bells from him, and hopeful that works, And Akira, we are going to need you to help with the bells"




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Squad Four~ training grounds thirteen

Suika nodded at Usiko's plan and rushed out the undergrowth with Akira. They ran towards their new sensei. He pretended to be looking for them. However, obviously Mando knew they were coming up behind him.

Suika concentrated all her chakra into her weapon, and burst into the air, above Mando sensei. "Wind Slice!" she cried out, the chakra spinning in countering directions. But just as her blade was about to hit Mando sensei, he jumped out of the way and sent Suika flying. The jutsu reverberated off of the group, knocking Suika's fist-- which were grasping her blade-- into her face.

Suika stumbled backward, flipping and summersaulting and spinning through the air. As she hit impact on the ground, she was sent flying in a flurry of limbs, her head crashing on ther ground first. She rolled over onto her stomach. She lay there for a few moments. She feared moving her head. She heard another clash. She hoped that the boys would be able to get the bells. Then maybe Mando sensei would see they tried working as a team. But Suika feared losing her life as a kunoichi. She lifted herself up.

Her shoulders collapsed, and she spit out a wad of blood. "Ouch..." she mumbled, her world spinning. She could only see the three figures fighting before her. She tried to get up, unsteadily, and collapsed to her knees. Would this be the end of her career.
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I know, medocre for posts and plot. Yeah, yeah, its common for plot. Whatever. I could see her flipping in my head, limbs everyone. Yoga helps here felxability alot, lets just say that if you cannot imagine it.

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Usiko~~

Usiko's plan had failed, the sensei easily saw through the shadow clone and got rid of it and Usiko before they could strike then did the same for the others. Usiko was knocked into the top of a tree, and he saw the other scattered around as well. Usiko quickly tried to get up, but found it hard. He eventually was able to leap down next to the others. They needed a new plan was his first thought but before he could think of one he saw the bells on the group next to where Mando once stood. Usiko was bout to charge it when he thought it might be a trap and held his ground trying to make a shadow clone to fetch it instead. But before he could he saw the master run back to the bells and grab them as if he had dropped them by accident. great his one chance and he blew it.




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Ringo Tori


Failing to wake up early Ringo rolled around sleeplessly in bed until it dawned on him that it was the first day of triaing in squads. Slappng himself on the forehead he jumped out of bed and stripped so fast it was almost a blur.

Still naked he gazed at his clothes with an undecisive stare, Fire-proof or flexy?

A gust of wind blew into his window and he chose quickly, Fire-proof.

Pulling on his clothes, slapping on his forehead protector to his leg he strode out of the single bedroom room which he owned. Packing the essentials, plus a little extra he closed the door. For a second a sadness engulfed him making him feel alone than ever before. Then as that faded fiery determination set in and a glow sparkled in his eyes.

Punching his fist up into the air, he screamed out, "I WILL be the next Hokage!"

With a foolish grin he began to run to the training grounds. When he got there he saw a woman impatiently tapping her feet, a boy in a tree and another person who had thier back turned to him. Ringo couldn't decide from the back of the head if it was a boy or a girl.

He waved to them and the woman stared back, a irritated look in her eyes. Ringo smiled apologetically then began to walk over to them.

Then as he was at least a few metres away he tripped. Before he knew it he was eating dirt and a cloud of dust had drifted up. A wind took it and blew the dust into his squad's faces, which they coughed at.

Ringo, his face bright red with embarrassment, stood back up and wiped away the dirt on his face. Then he walked the rest of the way towards them with a careful watchful glare at the ground.

He turned to the person in the tree, "You're good. I nearly didn't see it there at all!"

Incomprehension on the tree-boy's part. Ringo narrowed his eyes at the boy, almost magically Ringo pulled a stick from his under his shirt and pointed it at him, "You placed this here to sabotage me didn't you?"

"Uhh."

"Don't try to deny it! You're the only one who's close enough to the tree to put it in my path."

The women spoke up, "How did he put it there? he's been in the tree all the time?"

Ringo scratched his chin, "Hmmm."

Silence ensued. Then Ringo shouted out, "I'VE GOT IT!"

"What?" one of the squad asked.

"He summoned an invisible leopard that was trained by ninja to place things everywhere to confuse them and then when he got the leopard to put the stick there, then as I was walking in he quickly dismissed it so that I wouldn't notice it's presence." Ringo was very involved with his theory and was clearing seeing it as broad as daylight as he described it.

The woman sighed, "Oh my god. What kind of squad is this?"

Everyone was staring at him as if they coulnd't believe he graduated ninja school.

Ringo then grinned, "You all know I'm joking, right?"

"I picked this stick up yesterday before I came here and I already had this whole entire thing planned out right from when I tripped. And you fell for it."

He fell to the floor in laughter.
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Squad Four~ Training Grounds thirteen
Suika was still dazed and lying motionless on the ground when she heard the crash. She looked up. Usiko was in a tree, hanging over a branch, and Akira was lying on the ground a little ways off. She saw Mando sensei run back and grab the bells. He must've lost them.

Well, thought Suika to herself, looks like the teamwork plan isn't working. Suika got up, a little woozy and stumbled over to get her Maru Katana which was lying on the ground a little ways off. Her face was scratched from the blade, and she felt blood dripping down her nose. She wiped it off with her sleeve and yanked her hair back into a ponytail as Usiko dropped down from the tree. "We need a new plan," he said gruffly. He coughed and wiped beneath his eye where a branch had scraped him. "Well," I said, "obviously we need a new plan. That"-- said Suika motioning to the ground that was all wonky now from her faulty attack-- "was not supposed to happen."

Suika, however, didn't stick around much longer. She sprinted forward and jumped back into the undergrowth, not worrying about the others. This may be a teamwork excercise, but she still needed to get the bell. This was her only hope in life. She wasn't some child prodigy, she wouldn't make a living off music (because Suika is awesome at music. She can play various instruments), and she found no intrest in anything else. She needed to stay a ninja.

Mando sensei was waiting. His arms crossed over his chest. He was so scrawny. Suika gave a wry chuckle. She sprinted forward, her Maru katana held behind her back. Mando jumped out of the way to dodge her attack, but Suika only threw the maru katana. It sliced a piece of fabric off Mando's arm.

He jumped out of the way again, about to punch Suika into the ground. Suika, however, reached out, touched the bell with her forefinger, almost grabbed it. But Mando sensei took an elbow to her back. Suika stumbled to the ground. She almost caught herself.

"Gah!" she cried out in frustration as Mando ran again. Usiko and Akira caught up to her. "This is a teamwork excercise!" Akira said. Suika looked at him ironically. "Yeah, no duh!" She brushed her clothes off and got up. "So what's the new plan, Mr. 'Know-it-all'?" Suika was referring to Usiko. She glared at him. She had always felt like this when Kita or Usiko were around. Everyone loved them and looked to them for help because they were the Hokages sons. Suika was tired of it.
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(Bolt, the reason why I made the comment was because Koka said he'd die of embarrassment if he was caught doing Yoga. He just liked watching her stretch and contort her body around. Lol)

Team 5, Training Exercise.


Sarjen jumped down from the tree, "Okay kiddies! Line up and introduce yourselves!"

Koka, Denrei and Yahiko lined up infront of their new instructor and introduced themselves. The big man glanced over one another and smiled at them with pride, "So according to practice the three of you are to impress me or you go back to the academy. I won't do any of the horror stories which you probably heard about. I like to keep it fun and simple."

Koka whispered to Yahiko, "His face is so ugly and head so empty, I bet its a coconut."

"Hey, speak up," Sarjen pointed to Koka, "Say it louder."

"Your face is so ugly and your head is so empty, I bet its a coconut."

Sarjen laughed, "Bit slow, but least you got guts kid." He grabbed his knuckles from his waist and raised both of his fists slamming them into the ground, the earth opened up and a series of very sharp stone spikes encased Sarjen, "If any one of you can hit me just once, the lot of you pass. Work together. You got 1 hour or its back to the academy, kiddies!"

With that order Sarjen's body disappeared into the ground and out of sight from the Genin. No trace of him was left behind and he had retreated back towards the Hero Memorial under ground, awaiting the confused Genin searching individually before teaching the strength of a team. He had his doubts that any of the three possessed tracking skills, but even if they did, could they work together?




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"No more jokes. Your training begins now." Quin said, now that all three were line up in front of her.

Kita still felt embarrassed about being beaten about being beaten by her.

"My training is extreme. So if you can't take the heat get out now."

Kita didn't budge, nor did the others.

"Fine, your goal is to go into that forest behind you."

Kita looked around. it was the forest that his father had performed his chunnin exam in. I' will give you and hour head start. I will enter the forest to find you, your goal is not to get captured. Bonus points if you can catch me."

"You're test begins now," she screamed.

Kita and the others rushed into the forest. It was his time to get back at the women for sticking him to a tree.
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Usiko~~

"well, the first part obvious get the bells, i have another idea but we have to be very stealthy for it to work, and you last move just helped us out." Usiko said eyeing Suika. "now first move is that me and Akira attack him separately, make him think we are done working together, The i will charge once more, using five clones this time, you don't need to know how just that when i give the signal strike, I'll give the signal when i'm done, what i will then do is transform a sixth clone to look like one of you. He will obviously not expect that so then during that Akira will strike from behind, then once that happened Suika, chuck that weapon of yours at him. Now hopefully this attacks works. So first though we have to look like we are in a fight."
"oh, okay YOU BIG IDIOT THATS THE DUMBEDST THING I EVER HEARD" suika yelled
"LIKE YOU GOT SOMTHING BETTER" usiko played back
"YEAH, TO LEAVE" Suika said. then tuned to Akira. "AND IF YOUR SMART YOU SHOULD LEAVE TO"
"I AM" Akira yelled then both stormed off leaving usiko alone.
"good" Usiko mumbled and waited for Akira's attack.




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"Oh, okay YOU BIG IDIOT THATS THE DUMBEDST THING I EVER HEARD," Suika yelled.
"LIKE YOU GOT SOMTHING BETTER!" Usiko played back
"YEAH, TO LEAVE," Suika said. Then tuned to Akira, "AND IF YOUR SMART YOU SHOULD LEAVE TO!"
"I AM!" Akira yelled then both stormed off leaving Usiko alone.
"Good," Usiko mumbled and waited for Akira's attack.


Suika hid in the bushes until she saw Usiko go running out. She knew that Akira had made his attack. She she crept to the edge of the bushes and waited a few more moments until she was sure she could go.

Then Suika steadied herself, waited, took a deep breath, closed her eyes, concentrated the chakra until they were flowing opposite to one another. Then she released. She saw her Maru Katana whiz through the air. She sucked in a breath, in hopes that it would work.
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Hope this post works. I don't want to power-play too much. And by the way, where is Akira's player?

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