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Candles on the Water

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"I found someone!" Jake called. It wasn't John. It wasn't anybody I knew but she was holding on to life by a thread.

"Get her dry!" I yelled from my position in the river, "Emily!" She should have stayed up there. She knew she couldn't swim!

"Where's Emily?" I screamed. Chase began a frantic search. Knowing him, Emily would be found and fine within seconds.

Then somebody surfaced John. He was nearly dead, if not already. "Get him out." When everybody was found and dried off, John was still unresponsive.

"Who are you?" I asked the girl. She refused to speak. "If that's the way you're going to be, you aren't coming with us."

I left her sitting by the side of the river. Some thank you.
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***I think they got out of order***

Chase

Everyone went back to the hotel. Chase was carrying a unconscious Emily and Ballow and Jake were helping John.
"Hurry up. Get it," Melpomene said, opening the door.
"A journey of a thousand miles must begin with a single step." ~ Lao-tzu

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I was soaked but slowly dripping dry. We all sounded like chattering fools by the time we all got back to the room because of the cold, wet clothes. I walked over to where Jake and Ballow set down John on a bed.

"Is he alive?" I asked Jake.

"Barely." he replied grimly. I reached out to feel his pulse on his neck. It was slow and unsteady.

"Prop him up when I say the word." I instructed them. I usually would have asked Ellie, but she was helping Emily. I clasped my hands together and placed them under his lungs on his diaphagm. I pushed down firmly five times, paused and repeated. I remembered my mom teaching this to me and I silently thanked her when John sputtered water up.

"Now you do mouth-to-mouth." Jake joked while propping Jake up on some pillows. I threw him a murderous glare before checking John's pulse again. It was back to normal. He was sleeping now, but he would be fine.

"Twice I've saved your life John." I whispered to him. I knew he couldn't hear me, but I said it anyway. Jake turned to face me after helping John.

"What was that?" he asked. I had forgotten that Ballow and Jake were still there.

"Oh nothing. Just let him rest now."
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John

"Hey mate are you all right" Jake said. John pulled himself up he was sitting on his bed back at the hotel but still didn't have any energy to speak. " Yeah he just almost drowrened so he's fine" Kate said
"she got a point Jake" John smiled he looked around the room scanning for Liz,he saw Emily on the bed across from him " she like to black out dosen't she"
"yeah were kind of getting use to it" Ballow said John laughed and so due most of the group that was in the room until a look from Chase silenced them all John mouthed the word sorry to Ballow. He shrugged " hey Liz is in the other room so can I go see her ". Jake looked at John with a puzzeled exsretion as did Kate and Abi who was drifting between Emily and John. John was shocked "you left her their" John said resisting the urge to punch the nearsting to him very! Hard. John jumped on the bed and begun running to were he knew Liz would still be.




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[s]Emily

The second she woke she started blushing. It was so stupid of her to be so weak.

She lay there, pretending to sleep while everybody filed out of the room, laughing at her. The only one left in the room was Chase and John, who was asleep. Emily sat up and blinked.

"I knew you were awake," he said, the faintest trace of a smirk on his face. It made Emily blush even more.

Chase sat down next to her, playing with the edge of the blanket.[/s]
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Chase

"Woah!" Chase said, jumping up. He blocked the door before John could get out.
"Get out of my way," John said, growling.
"No. Melpomene left her there for a reason. And plus, you still need to rest. Geez, you almost drowned."
"Get out of my way kid," John told him.
"I would do what he says," Jake said, pointing out how much taller John was now.
"No," Chase said. John raise his fist and punched Chase in the face.
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**Sorry, just ignore my post above**
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****I'm lost from that last post. I'm just going to start were I left off****

Chase

John pushed Chase out of the way and started walked out of the room. "So much for that," Ballow said.
Everyone else left the room, leaving Emily asleep on the bed and Chase, who managed to walked to the other bed. His nose was bleeding slightly, but he was fine.
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Emily

The second she woke she started blushing. It was so stupid of her to be so weak.

She lay there, pretending to sleep while everybody filed out of the room, laughing at her. The only one left in the room was Chase. Emily sat up and blinked.

"I knew you were awake," he said, the faintest trace of a smirk on his face. It made Emily blush even more.

Chase sat down next to her, playing with the edge of the blanket. His nose was dripping blood. Emily raised an eyebrow.

"John got mad," Chase grinned and wiped his nose with a tissue.
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Chase

"So he's okay?" Emily asked.
"More than okay," Chase said. "He's mad now. We left behind his girlfriend apparently."
Emily blushed even more than she already was. "His girlriend?"
"Apparently." Chase looked curiously at her.
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"You can't trust anyone John." I said. I had pulled him out and began to talk to him in a separate room.

"What about Thalia." he answered.

"I know her. She was a friend of mine. We can't trust anyone."

"This is stupid. All we do is fight. There is no time for anything. I wish I had never gone."

"Would you like to rethink that statement." I asked.

"No. Of course not. I hate this."

"I can make it seem like this never happened. I can wipe your memory of everything that's happened to you so far. I can send you back to the time when you didn't know about any of this."

John just stared at me.

"Think about it." It was a challenge. But he needed it. He needed a wake-up call.
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John

Melepone looked at John waiting for a response." you have to let me see Liz, I love her".
"it's a phase you'll get over it" Melepone said these words with a harsh reality."you know I can really see why you don't have a kid, because your a selfish cow " the statement made Melepone mad ." fine go find your little cow and see how she brakes you but John be here tomorrow we've got a real mission no more fake monsters" John nodded.


John walked to inn carrying Liz. Apart from being a little shocked about being left behind she was fine.
Liz lay down on the big bed in their room " Liz I'm going tomorrow and I don't know when I'll be back" she looked miserable for a second . Then her face lit up " you know you are 16 physically" Liz took a step towards John, "yeah so it doesn't make me any better than the rest of the group"
"I'm just thinking you should have more responsibility in the group"
"no Liz even if I did want that Chase is kind of leader, he's good at it too"
"and I thought you liked me"
"shut up" John said laughung at her Joke they sat down on the bed and John starred at her stroking her long blond hair.

John pulled himself away from Liz gently so not wake her he pulled his pant on and then his jeans it took him a few minutes to find things socks. John opened the door fully dressed it was hard to leave Liz noing he might not be back it was all up to melepone and the training was only going to get harder John hoped their would be a mission soon he felt like he new most of the things, Time travel, stop disaster, kill some things, come back. It didn't seem that complicated. John guessed that Melepone wanted every body to be prepared for anything.
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No godmodding, sex scenes, perfect characters, killing off other people's characters unless granted permission to do so, or anything else on that list of 'don't dos.' No loopholes either.

Uh...it might be just me but....

Chase

Chase and Emily were making small talk for a long time, neither really knowing what to say.
"Hey, John got his girlfriend," Ballow came into the room.
"Your kidding me," Chase said, rolling his eyes.
"Nope," Ballow replied. "I'm going to go back downstairs with everyone else." He stepped out of the room, gently closing the door.
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Emily

Once ballow closed the door, Emily shook her head.

"John seems a little strange... The second a new girl comes along, he starts a relationship with her, regardless of trust," She looked back at the door.

Chase just rolled his eyes. He sat down on the bed next to her and started playing with a lock of her hair, which was still wet from the dip in the river.

Emily rested her head on his shoulder. She had listened in on Melpomene and heard that they would be battling more horrid monsters. She wanted this moment to last forever.

He turned his head and kissed her softly. Emily leaned back and Chase continued stroking her hair until she fell asleep.
I came into this world wrinkled and ugly. And no matter how much I accumulate here, it's a short journey. I will go out of this world wrinkled and ugly. So I enjoy life.



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