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I've been procrastinating for ages, but it's December and school's out until February, so I have no excuse not to critique. Give me your stories and I'll do my best with them. Tell me if you want a focus on anything specific, like characterisation or grammar.

What I'll Review.
-Anything in the fiction forums (I warn you, though, I don't know Fantasy very well. Other Fiction is my home).
-Non fiction.
-Scripts.

What I Can't/Won't Review
-Fan fiction (I'm generally clueless with most fandoms)
-Poetry (I'm not a poet. If pressed, I can give some general impressions, but nothing very specific.)
-Art

Cost
-Hopefully, my next star. ;)

My best reviews will be of prose, as I'm not very experienced with other forms of writing. Non fiction shouldn't be too bad, and scripts are about the same.

I'll review in the order that people post. There shouldn't be a delay of more than a day or so. If there is, just PM me if you need it in a hurry. :D

In Progress


Critiques Completed
-Some Sort of Complication. chpt 1 - PenguinAttack
-The Ghost Writer [Chapter one, part one] - Kitty15
-My Dearest Madelyn - anti-pop
-The Other Man - Rascalover
-The Love Note - Jamie_rocks
-The Ghost Writer [Chapter one, part two] - Kitty15
-Poison Love - Night Mistress
-First Kiss, edit - Dreamer
-My First and Final Escape - lilymoore
-Witch - wiccaryan
-Witch - CH3 and CH4 - wiccaryan
-ForEver, ForNever, ForAlways (Prologue) - lilymoore
-Grandfather's Bicycles - yrclever

-Mat
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Maaaaaatty!

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Start there. xD

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topic35167.html I don't need it any time soon but I'd love you to take a look and give me a general impression.
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Hello, Insomnia! *shakes hand*
I'm anti-pop :)

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This is romantic fiction, so I hope you don't mind. I'm submitting it in for a contest and want to be positive that I've fixed everything that needs correcting.

Thanks!


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romantic fiction: topic40060.html

Please review???

Tiff
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I'm done with the first three. I'll get onto your critique tomorrow, Tiff, as it's 2 in the morning and it looks like yours is a pretty long piece. Don't worry, though. It'll be there. ;)




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Thanks for the first part of my review! It was awesome.
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I just posted this and could really use some constructive feedback. Harshness is appreciated. :P

Name: The Love Note
Genre: Supernatural
Word Count: 4622
Link: post467874.html#467874

This is the first chapter. I understand it's very long, so if you don't have the time or just don't want to review it I'll understand.
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Part two is up and here's the link as requested. Thank you, Mat and no need to hurry.

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There you go, Jamie. Your review's done. Length is no problem. Oddly enough, I had less to comment on for you than most, so nice job. ;)

I'll get onto yours tonight or tomorrow, Heather. It shouldn't take too longs. Thanks for all the links, guys. And I really appreciate the PMs and donations people gave me. It's nice to know that I'm helping. :)




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will you review this piece for me?

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Hey, guys. Back from a quick holiday and all up to date. Anyone else need a review? :)




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Please. :)
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'Lo, Insomnia. I would /greatly/ appreciate it if you'd take the time to wade through the beginnings of my 'Nevestory Academy'? I realize it's rather long and there's quite a bit of description, but I'd appreciate whatever suggestions you might be able to supply! Thank you in advance, though I will also thank you afterward. ^_^

Here's the link! topic42234.html

Again, thank you so much if you do review, though I understand if you don't! -hugs- I'm Hannah, by the way. C:




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Eeep. Sorry, Hannah. I hadn't looked at this thread in a long time. If you still want your review, I'll get around to it sometime soon.



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