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Hi Mailice! Thank you for your review.

I like this sentence. The first thing that came to my mind was the fear of something new and / or the efar of the unkown. But at the same time the quote from someone (no idea who) who said it's not the fall that's bad, it's the impact or something, was coming to my head. It's also one of those brief moments where you realise that Van himself is a little scared and not sure what's coming.

Thanks!! I'm not sure if that was what I was thinking when I wrote that sentence, but I really love that interpretation of it and how it relates to Van's character. Thank you for showing me a cool new way to view my character!

Van hit the nail on the head. At the same time, it makes me wonder what is worse than death. But I think that´s more a question for philosophy classes.

True!

I really liked the way you described the room below with the columns and the signs. It was easy to put yourself in the room.

Thanks! Description is something I've been working on - especially with this story - so I'm really glad you were able to visualize the scene.

Do I detect a little humour here?

You do!

The dynamic between Van and Theo has improved since last time. Van doesn't act like he knows more than he does and has to show off and still keeps a calm head even after Theo holds him tightly by the arm. I really like his personality.

Thank you so much! Even though these two have a rocky start, I really do love their relationship. It's fun writing Van getting a little more comfortable with Theo with each new chapter. c:

Thank you again for your review!! It was really fun to read.