~nariel~

Lol. Very interesting. The dog’s fur was rough and mangled with all different kinds of dirt, mud, bugs. Add an 'and' after mud. Was this what I was afraid of? ...

Yet another great poem. Its building up inside me, Its should be it's. I got to see the pretty little picture, Above your final place. This was my favorite part. ...

I can totally relate to this poem. Weclome to YWS by the way. I think this is an excelent poem that tells readers what watching a loved one waste away ...

Hi lakegirls! I haven't seen you in a while. Hmmm, this poem was very interesting. I'm not sure about punctuation in poems, so I'll leave that to another reviewer. Now, ...

Hello, welcome to YWS. As Olivia said, you need to do two reviews before you post anything else. I took a peek at your story and I reviewed most of ...

Okay, I really really really liked this. It was really deep and it just makes so much sense. I especially liked the first few lines. They rocked. Maybe you did ...

Ha ha. That made me laugh (in a good way). This was a change from your mysterious first chapter. It was much more upbeat and lighthearted. I liked it very ...

Nah, this is too good to rip apart. :wink: Welome to YWS and this is really good, considering it's your first post. I'm pleased to see that you've already done ...

Hey welcome to YWS, my name is nariel and I'll be reviewing your story today. Both of them were chatting, taking quick glances at her, but it was mainly from ...

Hey, welcome to YWS! I see you already have one review, but you need two before you post something else. Thanks for doing at least one though! :) This was ...

First post? Wow! It's very good for your first ever post. I liked all the emotions and descriptions in this. I felt very close to your MC; I felt all ...

Hey, I just reviewed something of yours! Ha ha. Anyways, I hate to repeat myself, but again, you have to have 2 reviews before you post something. This piece was ...

Hey! Welcome to YWS! There's a rule on here about doing two reviews before you post your own stories. Anyways, onto your story. I don't really understand why you have ...

Hey, don't mean to sound harsh or mean when I review this (just a heads up).There were some good parts (see end of review) to it, but it also needs ...

This was an excellent story. I hardly found anything wrong with it and it made me laugh. The beginning was a little confusing, but once I go into the story, ...