~Volant~

(WARNING: evil editor at work!! XD I'm not a very nice reviewer.....) I didn’t even realize it was happening the first time it happened. I thought he had said it, ...

The clanking of chains and scrape of metal against stone interrupted Sam from her quiet thoughts, and she saw the guard, a Graark, dragging a screaming prisoner from his cell. ...

Normally I'm an evil reviewer, but since I'm not so good with poetry, I can't be as mean...-.- you got lucky, boy...haha It's a bit straightforward to me. Find a ...

”Oh dear,” he whispered. “Oh dear , indeed,” A voice croaked. Firm hands seized him by the shoulders and jerked him around to face the deck. “Stand still if yeh’ve ...

Again, Lyn, brilliant job!! This is an awesome story!! Whenever you post a new chapter, you have to pm me! haha. "Storm is brewing, he said, though not in English. ...

Oooh…I like. I like very, very much. Good idea, good flow, good pace, good grammar…well done, mate, well done. Isaac nestled his head in his pillow. “It’s about the sea.” ...

haha quick warning: I'm not a very nice reviewer. If anyone requests a review from me it's because they want a hard-core, un-sweetened crit. haha. “Both are operational, sir,” the ...

I like this. But the hard thing with fantasy is taking something utterly believeable and forcing your reader to believe it. I think you need a different way to introduce ...

Hm. Too much time on the worm's life in the beginning, not enough time on the death of the tree and the cruelty of the chainsaw. Other than that, very ...

Not flash fiction. It's more of a couplet, if you ask me, or an idea for a poem. I like the idea; it's kind of a paradox. No life after ...

Haha. I liked it very, very much!! Good start! …in a dark black trenchcoat … Dark black? As opposed to light black? That didn’t make sense to me and it ...

I liked this!! I liked this very much! It seemed a little rushed, but it's a good beginning. “Daddy, please wake up.!” “It’s me Adeline. The game’s over daddy. It’s ...

I like it. I just wish you had a bit more imagery/similes/metaphors/other tropes. It's a tad bit too straightforward for me. Also, I can't really tell your tone. Well, maybe ...

Hm. I remember somewhere you wrote "should of," but I can't find it....well, it ain't should of, it's should HAVE!!! HAVE HAVE HAVE HAVE!!! lol. I made that mistake a ...

[quote:]iEs me! In English, "It's me!"[/quote] The i as an upside-down ! only works with different fonts. it doesn't work with this font. I suggest you either change the story ...