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Hello there and welcome to YWS!!! :) Well, on to the review. I felt your writing was okay as I read through your story. My one major problem is your ...

Hello there :) My first review in months so here goes! I opened my eyes and stared at my bedroom ceiling. “It’s going to be a boring Sunday,” I thought. ...

Hello there Jash. I wasn't really going to say anything because other users have said so much already, so mine's just a comment. Anyway, you are really talented! and that's ...

Hello there :) As I was reading this, I could not help but feel that your lines were practically hanging onto nothing- no solid concept. So the poem in general ...

Hello there :) Well, this is bad writing, hehe. Taking it light heartedly, this could really make a good children's story. You know, the Cinderella type. Just throw in a ...

Hello there :) I'll just come out and say that I really didn't like this one very much. I think the general impression I get when reading your poem is ...

Hello there Delo could not think why the nobles would come to the slums but whatever there reason, The wispy shadow of fog lurked on the surface of the river ...

Hello there :) I need you to defrost me, I thought water was already defrosted. I think this line does not make sense in conjunction with the statement you made ...

Hello there :) I have a few nit picks that I'd like to discuss. The train hit the car that was stopped on the tracks with such an enormous amount ...

Hello there :) Yikes, this is a lot. I like your innovative list, haha. I think I should make one of these to keep my life entertained. 90. Be rich ...

Hello there :) I really love the idea behind this poem. It's very creative and different from what I see everyday. However, the poem itself to me seemed a little ...

Hello there :) This poem is utterly deep and I can totally relate to it. I don't think I've seen it before but it was quite good. What I don't ...

Hello there and welcome to YWS! :) I really liked your poem. However, as I was reading it, I could not help but feel that the rhyming was a bit ...

Hello there :) I was young. I was sick. Did I know you? Did I comprehend? I really liked this repetition. I think that "comprehend" is a very broad term ...

Hello there and welcome to YWS! :) What really bothered me about this poem was the fact that there was no punctuation. You had such beautiful lines but they had ...