ziggiefred

Hello there and welcome to YWS! :) So, I thought that this was a great story. However it was so short. Another problem I had was that you seemed to ...

Hello there :) I am with sodapoplunchbox on this one. It was very hard to follow the story at times. I have one suggestion to solve this problem; reduce your ...

Hello there I loved this a lot. It was definitely something different from what I've seen lately. I loved the movie the color purple, although this almost captured what you ...

Hello there :) A definite great start. I like your writing style. First off The sun was just starting to fall behind the hills. The birds now hushed as night ...

Hello there I think that you got a good review from blink already but I'll throw in my two cents. I actually found this poem a little amusing, especially towards ...

Hello there I love your avatar first of all. Anyway As the rope reached the end of the line, I began to ride the baby waves. As the boat gained ...

Hello there and welcome to YWS! This was okay. I think that the way you put forward your story was a bit unrealistic; meaning your statements were not very convincing, ...

Hello there :) What a cute picture. For the record, I used to read goosebumps and only goosebumps novels when I was between twelve and thirteen. Courageous move taking this ...

Hello there I thought I'd do the honors. :) Wow, I'm surprised that this piece still has no reviews yet. I absolutely loved this! I mean, alright, let's step out ...

Hello there I thought that I'd do the honours. :) I definitely like the way you write, it's precise and your vocabulary is wide. The problem with this story is ...

Hello there :) I thought that I'd do the honours. I only managed to read until "I never saw Stella again." This is a great story to come but I ...

Hello there I like this a lot. It was as if I was watching those horror movies where the MC opens the door and BAM! But this was excellent and ...

Hello there :) I don't know, I thought there was very little storytelling in this. Is it part of a chapter or is it a short story? What you could ...

Hello there There is only one problem in this poem and it's the lack of punctuation, because it can be great. I'm not going to correct anything like adding commas ...

Hello there :) I will first start with the minor errors I spotted while reading this: The sensible person living in my brain shakes it head. I think there is ...