I refuse to write poems of love
Bent over in the night struck down
When only its echoes I have felt
And its cadence I still seek
down lanes whose endings hint
of the sweet unfiltered sound
of the musings of the greek
and the earthiness of flint
No coloring of the agonies -
in which I've dwelt
Resembles the hue of the eyes-
when notions melt
And love's hand strips off its glove
To whisper the pen through
the poet's pale dawn
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I liked it, I thought it very deep. But that's coming from an emotional teenager, haha. I think I have to agree with the others, though, punctuation is a necessity. It makes it a lot easier to understand, and I won't be ashamed to admit I had a little trouble myself. Has extreme potential,though!
I liked your poem but I agree with Ziggiefred. Even though it is a poem you still need some sort of punctuation.
I also liked the topic and how you prove your points strongly. You showed your points very well.
Well overall I enjoyed it.
Can't wait to read more!
See you around
SimonCowellLuver
Hello there
There is only one problem in this poem and it's the lack of punctuation, because it can be great. I'm not going to correct anything like adding commas for you because it's a poem and I don't know your intentions in certain areas. Otherwise I loved it. it's different, it pounces and delivers. Also, your language style is very particular and unique and leaves me analyzing in my head; which is what I believe a poem should do.
So, good job!