zencherry

This is really awesome. This idea could be made in to an entire novel, a very epic novel at that. Keep up the good work, you are very talented.

I have depression, and this is exactly what I feel. You are an amazing writer, and I see absolutely no errors in this brilliant poem. It makes me feel really ...

Thanks so much for the review! I am posting a slightly edited of this story in the Sci-fi category of short stories soon.

Thanks so much for the reviews! Yes, this story was loosely based on a real nightmare that my step mother had...I really liked it, so I built to it and ...

Thank you guys for the reviews! Sorry for my grammar, I am 13 and still learning I guess...thanks again!

Cool! I read you're first one too...you might want to work on some grammar and things like that, but I love the story over all. You could go far with ...

Awesome! I love, love, LOVE the story line. I wrote a story recently kinda like this. It is called "The End", It is about the end of the world too. ...

Awesome! I don't think all Arabs are terrorists at all...or that all Mayans think the world will end...or that all chinese people are evil communists! Your not alone in the ...

Wow! I love it...I can't wait for part two! Keep writing...amazing.

Interesting...nice rythm, I like it. It is deep and mysterious in some ways...

Emotional and deep...sad, but I like it a lot.

Funny! It flows pretty good, and I like the rythmic devices! Awesome job.

I like the touches of humor, and the creepy atmosphere you put off so well! Very cool.

Cool! I like the vibe and atmosphere it gave me. I do think you can improve on your grammar and flow a little. Describe emotions and feelings in more vivid, ...