zalarus

hmm, i don't really see the immature angst part, though your other criticism was worthy and good. i was going more for a Camusian, existential tale of some sort. it ...

now that's what i call criticism! much thanks. i am implementing many, probably all of your suggestions, as you speak the undeniable truth. again, thankee.

hmm, well sir, i do not think you are in a position to be making demands of me. in fact, i consider that quite arrogant. by refusing to review until ...

hmm. well, first of all, thanks for the comment. i'm glad you bothered with something on this level. i've had more inspired moments than this. this really just didn't...flow, you ...

thankee for the comment. and that line has annoyed me for a while. this wasn't my proudest moment, and i've done a lot better since then, i think. but thanks ...

o internet! i do find it difficult to recognize satire when it's typed out, and not spoken aloud. but the fault is purely mine. i didn't read your words carefully ...

thanks for the critique. after looking this over, this may not be the best work i've ever done, even if it isn't ENTIRELY bad. but i must stress, i have ...

thanks for the criticism. the poetry of Allen Ginsberg really inspired this, particularly the poems Kaddish and Howl. anyone who liked this one should check him out. several of his ...

A poem is a poem it doesn't need to be great it just needs to be true to what you think and feel. excuse me? what is this even supposed ...

thanks for the review. you're right about the meaning of moksha. it does mean release/liberation, particularly in the spiritual sense. in hinduism, buddhism (which i occasionally subscribe to) and jai

sir, you are a poetic force. i am confident you will be at the forefront of the next great literary movement. anything less would be a gross injustice.

thank you kindly. indeed, this is the product of a mildly disturbed mind.

heh. so goes the story of billy joel. i thought that it might be about him when i heard the words 'piano man', but when he was called billy... yeah, ...

what? this is not a poem. it doesn't belong here. it belongs on a fortune cookie. sorry, but you should take this elsewhere.

a solid poem. the only thing i suggest is that you should make your lines longer. i found it kind of awkward to read, it being all split up. but ...