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HAHAHA!!!! I loved it! That was great! Why didn't we ever do this? I think we should take it to Mr. Huges and try to get it up as a ...

This was really awesome. I'm not to big on gramatical and spelling errors, I'm sure you can fix any on your own. But I loved this topic. It's so awesome ...

I know who this is about! Is it going in the book? I loved these lines: "and strawberry hair, once blond," I cracked up at that one. Hahaha! But isn't ...

Yeah, same thing here. It doesn't really grab your attention that much. When you're done, you just like, "Oh... ok." There's nothing much else to think about. Maybe if you ...

Yeah, I love the stars. You can see a lot of them where I am beacause I live in a small town but one of my most wanted goals in ...

Wow. That's awesome! I loved it. I'm hoping there will be more in the near future... riiight? :) Very suspenseful and kind of odd, in a good way though. Awesome ...

I loved this. The imagery was great as usual but the one nit-picky thing that bugs me is this part. "lacking in all the cracks that now grace its once-fine ...

yeah you probably should up the rating just to be safe. some people dont like reading stuff like that, no offence. i like this story personally. interesting. i kind of ...

*twitch* I caught that too Misty. Hahaha! It's good though, I like it. Athough I think it is a bit too short. It just doesn't seem... right to me. Oh ...

Welcome! Yes, great start. It pulled me right in. I love your physical description of the characters. I always suck at that part. Just in general I think your descriptions ...

I liked the imagery in the first stanza. Very cool. The second is kind of wierd. I don't know how. Lol! and why, may I ask, don't you just kill ...

its good but I think this topic is used too much. the language is a bit... harsh, i think. you should probably rate it so you dont offend people who ...

I agree with Reichieru. The character does sound a bit mean and selfish. I also think that there is a lot of yelling at the reader which is a major ...

I love it. Me, being the outsider and not knowing what any of this means, it seems so random a silly, which I absolutely love! It also shows a slice ...

I liked how you put jogging, running, panting, etc. on the next line. It is visually pleasing to me. And about the end there too, I don't know it you ...