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Thanks for the wonderful feedback. I'm working on fleshing out the story a bit more and making the changes you suggested. As for Anatase's name; my friend was writing a ...

Thank you for the lovely feedback. I really do appreciate it. I'm hoping to have part two up fairly soon (that is, once I get past some of my writers ...

Thanks so much. I'm hoping to have part II up in July.

Thank you so much. The () thing helped me a lot. Thanks for the helpful feedback, too.

Thanks. The next chapter should hopefully cover most of your concerns; I'm working it like this 1st chapter- Present Day 2nd chapter- Past 3rd Chapter- Future time and so on. ...

Thanks for the input. I have changed it to a 7-7 line scheme now as well, and I think it works better than the 9-7 did, honestly.

No problem. I love psychological stories; they're mosty what I write as well. If you'd drop by my profile and leave me a message some time, I thing we could ...

I'm glad it was at least decent. I have published another poem of this sort, but I don't believe I will be adding onto this one.

You have a few issues with sentence structure and run-ons. For example, the last sentence: "Oh shut up Alexander!" And the girl's friend grabbed her and started whispering to each ...

This is brilliant. So much thought in such a few words, I feel it is a good tribute. I just am amazed by how much you are involved in political ...

-Will find out. All the dreams have relation to each other, as you will clearly see when the story escalates. -Yes. -You're pretty much correct. The families nationality is Japanese/British, ...

-Will find out. All the dreams have relation to each other, as you will clearly see when the story escalates. -Yes. -You're pretty much correct. The families nationality is Japanese/British, ...

Thank you so much. I'm glad you enjoyed it.

Okay, um...WOW. Longest review I've ever gotten from you, and I appreciate it SO BLOODY MUCH. Thank you for the feedback, and the "he" in that one sentence was supposed ...

You're right about the tense-shifting, thanks for pointing it out so that I have the ability to fix it. Also, I don't tend to put a ton of thought into ...