Finished and edited, thank you YWS.
Same reviewing format:- second bed? Who else sleeps there? - so in the dream, is the raven Katatshi?-love the word 'orbs' for 'eyes' for some reason- the January 2, 1998 bit was eery, but I really liked it. It put readers on edge and want to keep going- "us"? I think somewhere I read that japanese people who are more elite or something in the olden days refere to themselves as plurals (e.g. us, we, etc)...or are you aiming for something completely different? - "you're bleeding thoughtless" is a tad confusing as well- you may want to space out your paragraphs more. It'll be a more attractive read and a lot more easy on the eyes.Okay, yet again, I enjoyed this chap. This one wasn't as intense as Infatuation or as gory and sickening as Bloody Cravings, but it was a nice read, the type that gives you a feeling that you are inching towards a cliff, the big picture. Like umm, trying to squint through a semi opaque cloth that's covering a masterpiece no one has seen before, you know. My point is, this has great potential and I hope to see another chapter soon. Oh, and i'm hopeless when it comes to naming mental disorders so you'd have to spell it out for me and maybe include a wiki link on it too for me to actually get it XD
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