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I sincerely appologise for my lack of fortitude in critiquing your piece, but as it turns out I have things to attend to and only have time to comment on ...

Right....well I have no other option but to label this emo poetry. I have a few problems with this piece, but nothing some editing can't fix - hopefully. Sympathy is ...

I appologize that it took me so long to comment after i got your email. Your story has been sitting in my printer for no shorter than a month, and ...

First of all let me say that I was drawn in by this story, but I found it to be distant at times. It's very good though. Also, I'm partial ...

The way you piece together your bragadotious claims and your inner thoughts is wonderful. At first I thought, "How narcasistic!" but after the fifth stanza it all fell into place. ...

Aww! I found this story imaginative and incredibly adorable. :-) I especially loved the KND reference, and I noticed that the KND do tend to blow things up when they ...

Sometimes I come dangerously close to understanding myself. good start here When I think about things, or when I press my face against the cold glass of the bus window, ...

This is very well done, as everyone else has mentioned. On to the questions! 1) Are the characters credible? Do they need some fleshing out? They are relatively complex, which ...

Interesting...I like this. The first and last stanza are self-explainatory and get the point of the poem across (about the insanely manipulative lover that you can not resist, even though ...

Goodness, thats a lot you left for us to assume. I'm sorry but there is no parallel between the poem and this story, it is far too vague. By any ...

The clock ticks 12:35 My phone tells me 12:32 On with packing I take it off the wall Striking black hands remind me of you Crossed legs on the orange ...

It would probably go in nonfiction, or your blog. Literary-wise: This sounds like an entry from a devotional journal. There is alot of supposition and pushing religion. It isn't neccessarily ...

Oh my gosh, this absolutely made my day ^.^ This is the only problem i spotted: or some pasta--mama mia i think 'maybe' would work better than 'some', but thats ...

This is a start, but bubble has excellent points. You walk two steps ahead I’ll walk two steps behind It makes sense for you to lead And me to follow ...

*dies* I'm going to appoligize in advance for this critique. This isn't poetry. Simply because something is "expressive" does not instantly make it a poem. Let's go through this line ...