i agree with bubblewrapped. It's way too short. It could act as a nice intro. and i think taking out the last line from the first sentence is good.
Expand on why it makes sense for you to follow and why you are unable to walk side by side with him/her.
I really like the idea though, I can relate to the thoughts that make up this poem.
^^
-jazii
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