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It seemed a little crazy to begin with. It felt like you were saying ‘So, the human race is wiped out… and now here’s a giant troll thing!! RAR!’ and ...

I like it so far. You did leave us hanging at a crucial part, though. How old is Erik now? You said he was robbed of his parents at 8, ...

Good story :) One thing I noticed is that the way your main character described himself seemed a little egotistical. He described himself as ‘having a warm smile and perfectly ...

Nice work! :) And some very scary bandits. I liked all of it, even though I was a bit confused at points. I had trouble trying to figure out whether ...

You have an interesting story here, but you need to work on your writing. You have major information dumps in the first few sentence, giving away lots of opportunities for ...

It was a good read, but I didn’t really know where this story was going. So the kid has a kind of superpower and a gang of cool friends, but ...

It was a lot of fun to read :D you did a really good job of portraying that kind of desperate, street-life kind of attitude. The only thing I was ...

I thought it was very good! Quite suspenseful, I was glued to my computer screen! :D If I could add a few comments… Oh, yet it was anything but.   ...

I thought it was good! It definitely made me want to read more towards the end, and I love mystical things like werewolves J. the only thing that annoyed me ...

I really loved it, RainStorm! J I loved all your characters, and the idea of the Byari. Even though this is only your first installment, I can tell the plot ...

i didn't really like it. i've read so much poetry that sounds just like this so i didn't get any feeling of originality. it sounded like you wrote from your ...

well first of all i'll say that i would love to see a second part to your story and see where this is going. right now it seems really basic; ...

i loved this beginning!! i liked a lot of the things you said, like the part about everything being so 'white' in her life. the only feeling i wasn't too ...

well, this was a nice start, i thought. it could be one of those super short prolouges and then the next chapter you could have him in Alaska, or you ...

As I sit here listening to sad Taylor Swift songs, I realize how shitty my life really is. My love life, that is. The rest of my life is pretty ...