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Re: Ad Infinitum (first 5.8k words, tentative title)
The MC's voice confused me at first. The way he spoke wasn't straight forward and some times it took me a couple of goes to understand what he was saying, ...
Oct 19, 2011 -
Re: Airplane lines
Hey there! I think this was quite cute. I'd never really thought too much about the lines in the sky made by the airplanes before, but now I can see ...
Oct 19, 2011 -
Re: Nothing
Hey there KoWolfie! Welcome to YWS! I'm going to try my best to review this for you. So, first impressions. This isn't bad. It's a little vague at times, and ...
Oct 19, 2011 -
Re: Sportsmanship
Hey there Mistie! The writing itself is good. I didn't spot any grammatical errors apart from these here - “I’m fine.” She nodded, bobbing her dull red curls. 'nodded' should ...
Oct 17, 2011 -
Re: My Heart Tightens
Hey there Hollow! Welcome to YWS! I hope you have a great time here :) As for a review, I'll try and be as helpful as I can. Sargsauce has ...
Oct 17, 2011 -
Re: The Sky is Beautiful
Hey there Pink! This was beautiful! The subject matter was sad; it's always hard to read about someone who's gone through a tough life/situation, but it always seems to make ...
Oct 15, 2011 -
Re: Miranda
Hey there MorningMist! Welcome to YWS! I read this the other day but didn't have time to review, so I'm back now. So, overall, this isn't bad. You have basic ...
Oct 14, 2011 -
Re: Lifeless Friends(continued) Part 1
Hey peanut! I was taking a break from YWS when you posted the original piece so I had a quick read of that before I moved onto this. Honestly, I ...
Oct 13, 2011 -
Re: Taboo {1}
Hey there! So, I saw you posted this a couple of days ago and as I don't think I've ever read anything by you, it went straight onto my reading ...
Oct 13, 2011 -
Re: Dreams Tell Lies - Chapter One
Hey there Icy! So I was totally going to review this for you about a million years ago but life got in the way as it seems to be doing ...
Oct 13, 2011 -
Re: Hook. Chapter 3.
I'm back again! Nit-piks first. He could hear the heavy foot steps as his pursuers gained. 'foot steps' is one word. Turning sharply down an ally Ares zig zagged between ...
Oct 12, 2011 -
Re: Hook. Chapter 2.
Hey again Dragongirl! I'm back for more. So I'm still enjoying this story. Ares is a great character and I loved how you gave us a brief description of him ...
Oct 12, 2011 -
Re: A House Is Like A Mouse Trap..
Hey there Sakura! I don't normally enter the poetry forums, mainly because I suck at writing them, but seeing as you always comment on my novel, I thought I'd take ...
Oct 10, 2011 -
Re: two crescent moons 1.2
Hey there Stella! So I think the reviewers before me have already done an awesome job of mentioning all of the things that I was going to point out, and ...
Oct 10, 2011 -
Re: Hook. Chapter 1.
Hey there Dragongirl! Seeing as you were nice enough to read my novel, I thought I'd drop by here and see what I could do to help. First off, I ...
Oct 10, 2011