writergirl15

"guard the color" cool

That little bit about the basin I was still writing cause it felt wrong. I think it is a wee bit better but I will see what me brains thinks ...

oops, this was suppose to be a review, Moderator. Pardon me, I am no spammer. :)

I like this poem, it's fun though I am little dirstracted by what is it about exactly. I want to know how idea and memory connects that crazy adventure you ...

I like this poem, it's fun though I am little dirstracted by what is it about exactly. I want to know how idea and memory connects that crazy adventure you ...

I like this poem, it's fun though I am little dirstracted by what is it about exactly. I want to know how idea and memory connects that crazy adventure you ...

Tnank you so much, I am totally getting what you are saying about concluding. I am not sure how to finish but I will think about it. Thanks.

thank you, ah....the red flags are like those things in the water the sections off from the shallow to deeper parts.

i am not sure how to edit here so looks at this instead. That perplexing blue Knocks the air out of you just by looking Makes you breathe in Salt ...

Thank you so much! I revised it & put in another work because some people seeme d to like it as is. Plus I just want to watch as it ...

thank you so much! I was actually, looking for that effect but I was sure how. How about these words: Clap, thunder, applaud, splash, roar, roaring?

oops, I am sorry, this was a long time ago!

ooops that was NOT intended

"Her head was well placed on her shoulders" of course it is unless it is too small or to big. But to me this seems unneeded. But its good

just because the rythm is isn't consistant doesn't mean anything. I think I see rhyming uneven in famous poems, you can break rules all the time. This is great! except ...