wonderland

THat was very straight forward and blunt, but you could have dwindled around and put some emotion in. But, I totally get what your going for, and I also feel ...

Werewolves? Although i loved the twist, and the fact that you brought in the fantasy element this far in, you have to make sure it flows correctly, now it just ...

Alright, so, I really loved your beginning! It had everything, little descriptions to set the mood, then the accident that set everything off. Amazing. The only thing I'd suggest is ...

Alright so, Vampires? Really? Unless, they aren't vampires. You should make the race clear. As for your piece, there isn't much the review. It's just some background information, giving me ...

That was slightly confusing. You can actually slow down, and describe more. Your description was great at the begging, but somehow got lost later on, leading to my confusion. Really, ...

Is the boy Jonah or someone else? THat was sort of confusing, didn't really make much sense. I'd suggestest maybe slowing down, adding more detail and emotion To, be honest, ...

That was pretty gutsy, posting one of your private journal entries up here. I feel like, the way you right, really had me feeling what you where reading. I really ...

Interesting beginning you got there. It definitely makes me want to read more. Your writing style is simple, and to the point, which I like. I even enjoyed your beginning, ...

Not horrible, no But needs work, yes. Don't worry, i know what its like with writers block You have so much going on, with little emotion. There were so much ...

Hey! YOu really are a fantastic writer. The only one nitpick I have is this paragraph "This, my dear sister, is my room." He landed on the mahogany bed with ...

That was a very gentle poem. I really found it lovely and romantic. what does the word 'zephyr' mean? That was my only problem I love the image that the ...

WOw! You have some stunning imagery, which is strong and paints a lovely picture for the reader I could feel the release of adrenaline from its cage, making my heart ...

I love how you gaze the dragons some good, in-depth personalities, same with your human characters. YOur writing is strong and Sarkia has a nice narrative voice. I love this ...

So, have I mentioned there is no possible way you could be fourteen? because your writing gives off this really mature vibe (In a good way, trust me) This poem ...

You rhyme. Mad props just for that! Now, I dont watch lost, becuase it confused me, but just readin your poem, I can guess that the relationship is full of ...