wolfgang87

Good work. I have some suggestions. -The word "Then" is used quite a bit. I would suggest getting more creative with the usage and not using that word so often. ...

Nice format. I have a few thoughts. -Your sentences are run-ons. You should make it more clear where sentences begin and stop. -You should put either commas or periods at ...

Very well written. My thoughts are few. I could really feel the pain through the words you most expertly chose. But on the sixth line, "But they were dismayed, and ...

This is obviously the writing of a mature person. You sure know how to use your words in a cultured sense. I really like the way you spelled Jakob, it ...

I feel the pain through the words. I can relate to this. It is indeed a good topic to touch since it is so relatable. I have a few thoughts. ...

The title did not make me expect what I have just read. It was a little different from what I expected, but different is good. Your vocabulary is intriguing and ...

This is a very deep poem. I can feel the emotion and enjoyed losing myself in words. I do, however, have some thoughts. -In the first paragraph in the last ...

I share your pain of wanting to express to someone what cannot be said. I have a few thoughts on it. Title- I really like this title. It really sums ...