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The steak similie seemed out of place. I know you could think of a better one. So kindly do so.

Aggh... major tense issues. But well written, all the same

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Ok, thanks for all the feedback from everyone! It's been most helpful :D And thus I present the revamped, re-scribed version. [edited in first post].

This title just made me not want to read it. That may sound presumptious, but it's the truth.

If done correctly, this could be interesting. But so far, it seems to lack enough detail to present intrigue-building plotlines. Well, I'd say work on what you've got before posting ...

Ahh...the irony. I liked the 'uncertain motives' of Rufus at the end. And the operative's reactions :p.

Lol. It seemed perfectly sensible, even considering the time. I shall do a decent edit sometime tomorrow, but for now; goodnight.

OMG!!! I don't have time to read it atm (I'll probly get around to it later) but I just love your opening line :D

Hmm.. I spose I'd peg this in the 'Other' section at the bottem. Though I spose it is in fact ficticious... Regardless, It was an interesting read. I'm not exactly ...

yeah gotta love reviving old poems, though :D -crit ticket- (if you so choose)

Thankee much for the crits... Sorry about the ambiguity of it all. Here's the next segment: And then Rod remembered; he had to find the Spare. It had come to ...

Ok, You're completely in the right on the rhyming bit. As for the rest, I suppose we'll just agree to disagree, then?

I know bumps are frowned upon, but hasn't anyone anything to say about this at all?

if you add some length and build on the message of this, it could be hauntingly wondrous. Good luck with that :D ~Ed