"Mice"

by FUZZHEAD
  • May 19, 2007
  • Poetry
  • Narrative

I wrote this a long time ago in the third grade, so it's not Robert Frost or Lewis Carroll or anything.


Little mice,
Scurrying around.
One just sniffs,
The other fell down.
Lookin' through the maze,
Tryin' to find the cheese.
Leave out the veggies;
They won't take peas!

:roll:

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Fand
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Fand commented · Sat Jun 02, 2007 8:47 pm

I love poetry written by kids... it's always so cute!

:lol:

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jessibee
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jessibee commented · Thu May 31, 2007 5:36 pm

ok, this was really cute! it honestly made me laugh out loud in the end. it's simple yet heartwarming in a way. great job

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whence
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whence commented · Sat May 19, 2007 8:54 pm

if you add some length and build on the message of this, it could be hauntingly wondrous.

Good luck with that :D

~Ed

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oregongirl
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oregongirl wrote a review · Sat May 19, 2007 2:14 am

how cute! :) I can understand that you wrote it awhile ago! It was short, very short! anyway I liked it a lot!

:elephant:

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M.B.Author
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M.B.Author commented · Sat May 19, 2007 1:46 am

Aaaawwwwwwwwwwwwwwww, that was so cute! It was adorable. But a little short, I understand that you wrote it awhile ago. But, still, it was cute. I liked it alot.

-- M.B.Author



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