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You show clarity of your emotions in this peice. When you told methis meant a lot to I can now tell that it's true. I like the fact you ut ...

Wow, This is one creepy story. All though it's creepy, it is still fanTASTIC. It was compelling yet dark. Stephen has a funny last name, is that on purpose? I ...

This, I'm afraid, was a hard read. I'm not trying to be cruel, but you NEED to remember to space. And I didn't really get the point of this. Prologues ...

I really liked this. It capturedher emotions perfectly. First it was sadness then astonishment when he came back. I think this could go far. hat could be a prolgue, then ...

Caught my atention pretty well. But the whole lanky, talentless orphan girl seems really cliche to me. True having an orphan character gives them interesting backstories, but it's been done ...

Really mysterious. I didn't like the flow, however. Too many unnecessary commas like in the bit whereit says "Outside the rooms in the corridor, was a girl, stood motionless, staring ...

Beautiful,but that's not all this little eice is. It's also chilling, chilling to know that i'm part nazi! I didn't know that! But it's great to chill the readers. This ...

A story of a romanceover an online chatroom... Atad Cliche for me sorry. I loved the story though, very good. It's way better than the others on this topic. Again, ...

I took a deep breath in, feeling the ocean air blow through every strand of my long gold hair. "Lainey? We are ready to go." I heard my brother, Jared, ...

Overeasy, my favourite mod. This was AMAZING! Don't be tempted to scrap this because people say you should start with chpt 1. I like the fact you are trying to ...

Sorry to be lame, but this sounds too 'grown up' to be a fantasy fiction. Unless your target audience are adults; then i'm totally wrong. but try to hmm... 'dmb ...

Hey Pen, olli here. great story, and thankies to fruit basket for the grammer corrections!!! very interresting, but againa book being a portal is quite cliche. sorry ifit's too harsh ...