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Okay, so I loved this poem :). I really did, if flowed (mostly) really well, and everything seemed to fit together....However, here are my suggestions: Every hour, Seems like a ...

Alrightyyyy so I did realllyyyy like this poem, and I LOVED the story behind it, but I have to admit it tripped me up trying to read it. It felt ...

I really liked this poem, and it seems like you did a very good job. You seem to be very loyal to your country and that is something to pride ...

I really liked this :). I'm not really into this style of poetry, so the fact that I liked it is really something! I especially liked the start: Eyes tempting, ...

Soooo you have a lot of potential as a writer :). This is not a bad piece of work you've got here, but I would suggest you play around with ...

I like the over-all idea, it is a good start, but there is some work that can be done. Over all, your poem is simply about being left at the ...

First off, welcome to YWS! Secondly, this poem is good but lacks context, I suggest adding and explaining. You'll find (just as I did when I joined) that everyone rips ...

I love it, its good, but you want it to be GREAT, and I here to tell just just how I think you could do that :) Alright, so first ...

I like it but try to break it up. I would suggest: Floral stains, Cats and Love trains I am doomed to talking to walls and felines collecting whats old ...

Alright, this poem (just to be honest) at first creeped me out. I liked it yes, but your word choice and use of imagery really made me a little creeped. ...

Alright, I like the idea but I do have a few suggestions for you :) So I was right all along. I can't believe that it's all wrong. Like a ...

Hey, first off, great poem and I know the feeling of being really really pissed off at a family member, for me it's my dad. I do have to say ...

I love the poem :) you did a great job capturing the annoying feeling of having yet another long day. It's cute and fun to read, but seems to stop ...

You so far have a great idea going, but try to tidy it up a bit maybe? Here are my suggestions :) Some day I wil have, Already been pointed ...

I liked it a lot, I like the rhyming that seemed (almost) perfect, and I liked the theme. It really made you think and wonder about what was really going ...