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Re: You
nice one here,lovely rhyme...makes sense,i don't have ant other thing to say,i mean i didn't find any errors in your language...but i didn't feel the poem(maybe because i was in ...
Sep 6, 2013 -
Re: Mother
omg!i love your work..jeez!its great,mind blowing..i think i can see the new "danielle my my,you captivated me,i like the concept,the fact that the mother got married early because she thought ...
Aug 27, 2013 -
Re: Vicky...Not so Icky?
hahahaha...nice,i love it,laugh out loud...this is cute,you really got me interested with this piece,but what's going to happen next,i mean the fairies,you know i was actually thinking that since the ...
Aug 27, 2013 -
Re: Chapter 5 of The Unchosen Ones
--------------------------------------------------------havent read the other chapters--------------------------------------------------but i think this one is ----------------------------------------
Aug 25, 2013 -
Re: The Lonely Room
um..its okay,though i don't get...i actually read this because the title was catching,interesting if you know what i mean,i would agree with what leo said,its more of a prose than ...
Aug 24, 2013 -
Re: Dreaming of You
nice,cute,wonderful,nice conception,though you made a mistake in the third line,"i try do stand but all control flees"don't you think it should be "i try to stand" i don't know,i'm just ...
Aug 24, 2013 -
Re: h
you got me scared shitless,this work here is nice but not really that scary like that though i said it scared me shitless,okay,it's good,not that thrilling like that,i actually like ...
Aug 23, 2013 -
Re: I want to be punished no more, Daddy.
awwwwwwwwww.feel like crying,that girl must have suffered pretty bad when her dad was in bad shape,really feel for you know why i like this work?because its a reflection of what ...
Aug 23, 2013 -
Re: Sister once close to me, why can't we once be?
wowwwwwwwwwwww,spiritually nice,lol don't mind me,its wow!the bomb,don't know why,but while reading this"pink's true love"came to mind------its wonderful,two sisters once close but due to some factors
Aug 23, 2013 -
Re: I am just a writer
UM...this work is great 'kay,i like the concept,its refreshing and well...i couldn't stop looking at it,its great,believe me you,you are definitely a this your first poem?i really don't have much ...
Aug 23, 2013 -
Re: No Way Out Prologue
wowwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwww,cute.though you made some mistakes like"my hair was suck to my face"its supposed to be"my hair was stuck to my face"then in the next paragraph,there was also a mistake there"was ...
Aug 23, 2013 -
Re: When The Rain Falls - Chapter 02
cool,i actually like this book,the plot,the setting,the imagination and everything,i think its cool,when the rain falls is also a suitable title,how i wish this book was in paperback then i ...
Aug 7, 2013
