victoria781

[quoteMy love, I hate you,This passion in my heart,Stems not from unending springs of love,It comes from the stench of the stale river,Where we once knew love.The mantle of love ...

"Days teach me To always dream However, it may never come true But that's the best way To live my life through." Should be: "Days teach me To always dream. ...

Great job :) I love the image it gave me of a choir howling to the moon. Imagery is always the first I look for in a poem. So with ...

I'm just slightly confused. In the beginning, are you outside and looking into the sky? Maybe you could say "when staring into space" and "looking at the stars, I feel ...

Hey :) I say you need to focus on an image. It feels like a list, so I'm not understand/getting the emotion you intend for me to feel. You do ...

Fantastic :) It's a great little piece of story. Talent if you were able to write that up quickly on your phone. I would wish it to be a little ...

Don't focus on it while writing. Just write whatever comes to mind, and if necessary, make small changes. In the meantime, read other poems and learn a bit about the ...

Nice job :) It was nice to read something with a different structure. I think you could probably use a bit more detail, so that I have a clearer image ...

I like how this rhymes. It's great but for a couple lines that don't fit the rhyme scheme. "And then the evening unfolds" (add another syllable) "To view with serenity ...

"The beating of my heart, increases as light goes dark." "My feelings grow stronger, Though I know nothing of you." "Is this true?" (Don't need the "though") "The thought of ...

Haha, I loved the first two lines. Great passion in that. Not so much the following two; they sounded, to me, a bit weaker "You made me...you made me..." I ...

I think the 3rd stanza should be left out. It adds nothing to the poem. Also, there is quite a bit of stalling in the poem...I wish you'd condense it. ...

Hmm...I was told by some poet great that good poems will always paint an image. No matter the topic, the words you share must detail some picture in the mind. ...

Oh, I loved this. It was great to read. I don't know much about meter, but something seemed a bit off at times...I felt inclined to add or take away ...

Hey, I 'm new and I have little experience. I, honestly, am a little intimidated in here and do not mean to belittle anyone.. I will say I liked this ...