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Heyo Tosh :D You'll have to forgive me, for I haven't read the previous chapters. Perhaps if this one peak my interest, I'll take a look at them :D But ...

Back again :D He, Pook Keggog and Pook Goreek Add a comma after 'Keggog', since you're listing things. Pook stopped, dead in his tracks. No need for a comma here, ...

Back again :D The Koog nodded, "A Cliff needs a Koog." he stated. You should remove the 'he stated', you're already implying that he's talking after your first three words, ...

Okay, so maybe not as soon as review day starts Hey guineapiggirl! Nor had they caught trout, haddock or plaice, squid, prawn or shrimp Nor is used when implying or ...

Yo, hamandcheese. I'm here to do some reviewing. Blood, she thought. Blood and gore. Combine both of these sentences and make all of her thoughts italics. The Italics part includes ...

How about I just correct EVERYTHING, huh? So check the spoiler if you dare >8D "I really didn't mean to do it , " I tell Alpha Rain over and ...

This may be a bit of a lazy review because I'm doing this late at night. So if at any point it feels that way, please let me know. seven ...

I said I'd give you a review, so I'm busy don't kill me I'll get to it eventually here I am. raising his hood up to try to conceal his ...

Backs agains :D Can't believe I didn't catch this before, but Five people had disappeared on her watch since the chips to prevent unlawful death were implemented. Maybe you should ...

Hello there, French :D Since what you have here is a block of text, I'm going to go ahead and try to fix that. So check the spoiler to see ...

Hey there RWG :D Okay, so you've got a bunch of text here and I'm not sure if it's because of YWS formatting or because you wrote it like that. ...

Hey there Anir :D The consistent rings of That should be 'ringing', to keep it in line with everything else. 6. 33 am. That should be '6:33 AM'. previous night ...

Hey there leaseal :D After reading this through, I could tell you're real problem was your spacing. I mean your grammar was bit off here and there, and you missed ...

Hey there Starleene :D The female voice This should be ' a female voice', saying 'the' makes it sound like it's the only one. If that makes any sense. This ...

Hey there, Cookiez xD I sighed as I sat my textbooks This confused me at first. I thought you were missing a comma at first, but then I realized you ...