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Hey there ROD! Nice piece you got here :D First of all, I liked that you were able to bring the beginning and the end together with the Man. That ...

Hey Carlos :D I'm here to continue reading the series like I said I would. Now first off, I feel like this is more of a prologue than a first ...

It's been a while since I've done this, but I just find that there are far too many grammatical and spelling errors to ignore. In the depths of the misty ...

Hey North! This was really cool! Your grammar and spelling was really good throughout, and the story flowed very well. Although I have one small nitpick; She approached a metal ...

Hey sourdude! Remember me? I'm here too tell you the good and bad of this little tale of yours. What I really liked about the story is the plot. What ...

Hey Carlos! I was gonna point out the grammatical and spelling errors, but it looks like Noelle already did it for me. I can say, though, that this is an ...

Hiya Clarity! Veeren here to rip apart review your work! First off, the bad: - There is quite a bit of grammatical errors throughout the passage, which I'd actually correct ...

Wow. This really is touching. I can tell you put emotion into your writing, and to this guy, it really pays off. You got your story through to me and ...

WOW. This was an absolutely beautiful story :D I loved the way you told it, and really don't think there would've been a better way to. While there are a ...

Hey there Charlotte! Nice piece you got here. But just a few critiques. First off is in the second paragraph, "What happened to you eye?" I'm pretty sure that's supposed ...

I feel like I want more after reading this. I was actually kind of singing along with my own beat in my mind. :D I really like and and think ...

Hey neverendingthoughts, first off welcome to YWS! Since I don't usually read or write this type of work, I don't think I'm allowed to tell you my personal opinion on ...

I almost cringed while reading this, almost. There just doesn't seem to be enough narrative included to creep me out enough. If you could work on that, you're work would ...

I'm not a poet, so don't quote me on this, but I thought the poem was lovely. Except for a few bumps, I think it flowed nicely and sounded good. ...

Well not much I can say after the last reviewer, but I think it was a nice short story. I think you can take this story farther and build it ...