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Re: Life has left it's scars
My scars date back to my early childhood. But you must understand i am no monster nor am i insane but im quite misunderstood. They called me names and gave ...
Sat May 23, 2009 1:19 pm -
Re: SAA: Sexually Abused Anonymous: A Memoir
Dream That is the key to it. This is something that only you can make go away. No one can be there to help you get rid of it. I've ...
Sat Dec 06, 2008 3:40 am -
Re: Hypocrite
This would be so much better if you only worked at it more. I want to see what you are driving at here. If you added in your emotions aboutt ...
Wed Aug 20, 2008 3:49 pm -
Re: What Lies Beneath the Fallen Rain
Omg! i love the zipper! so much! best ride ever! was it skelly's? Because if it was, you had the chance of being in the one that was just puked ...
Fri Aug 15, 2008 4:55 am -
Re: Dark storm of sorrow
I liked how you made the structure so insignificant and separated every little detail but i did notice one mistake He still gives me the butterflis, too. It should be ...
Wed Aug 13, 2008 3:04 pm -
Re: The Oppressed
I think it should be: "Because i am a stranger to you, I am the oppressed." Well that's what I think. It was a very powerful and beautiful poem and ...
Wed Aug 13, 2008 4:15 am -
Re: Crawling
i have to say that its not the best. I wish you told us where you were and how come they ould never find your son under the debris were ...
Thu Jul 24, 2008 2:10 pm -
Re: F****d Up and Numb
haha i love it r u writing any more of this its so good and funny was it just your immagination needing to be written down? or is it a ...
Thu Jul 24, 2008 1:35 am -
Re: Bathroom Arrest
haha it was pretty funny not to mention adorable i know hwo it feels especially when your hiding during a game and every time you have to take a piss ...
Wed Jul 23, 2008 7:21 pm -
Re: Secrets
i loved it i loved it as much as james loves melly every second that i read i loved other people are critiquing this and that well i could tell ...
Wed Jul 23, 2008 6:24 pm -
Re: Ejected
The intro was grabbing, but if you could add in what your enviroment looked like, it would be better to picture it. Some one could esily think you were in ...
Wed Jul 23, 2008 2:13 pm -
Re: Poison Love - chapter 1
some sentences were a bit off and you forgot some of the words, but the human brain usually corects them. Sadly, in this world, every writer is a critic to ...
Tue Jul 22, 2008 11:58 pm
