torsa_n_muse

thanx for that response. yeah...i think u r right i shud replace the 'hues' it doesn't quite go wid the thing, so will edit the poem. but thanks for that ...

okay so that was indeed a short and sweet effort! kudos!

hey that was nice stuff!!!

:D well done! but u need certain areas to improve. the story was good, and so was the style, but you shud improve on your presentation! keep it up!

thanx for liking the for the mistakes u point out, i will take them into acount and try to edit the thing accodingly soon. till then god bless, bye! :D

hey..u seem to dig out my poems frm oblivion..neways thanx for doing so... as for the rhyming pattern, i just wrote the way i felt, so no forced rhyme..but the ...

thanx for all the appreciation and crit. it definitely helps. i'll try to revise the stuff and use a more 'intense' language as you said. thanks, anyways! :D

:D Thanx Muse...yeah even this sucks me. when u write a piece and post it u like it 2 be read and then wait for feedbacks but i guess against ...

hi, i have revised the entire piece and edited it, addding punctuations, dividing paras and doing neccesarry changes in confusing sentences. if there's still some correction required or any critcism ...

hi, thank you for reading my poem and liking it. it seems that the last para is bothering most readers so i will try to find a suitable substitute to ...

hi brian, yeah i m from India. i think such a topic like writing is universal in itself and a website that provides universal is bound to reach out. now ...

well, first of all thanks for commenting on the story. yeah, you are right i should have broken it up into more paras, and as for the confusion, i re-read ...

thank you for the appreciation. and as for the last stanza well i needed to have it to explain the first three stanzas and get the meaning of the metaphor ...

thanx for your criticism jenn, i will modify my post accordingy! :) your comments were well observed! :D -torsa

hi boni, :D i agree to some of your comments but by and large you have misinterpreted the piece. here first of all the 'he' is the almighty our protector ...