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I really enjoyed this! I thought it was really cute and sweet! My favorite line definitely had to be the last one. Everyone always tells the little bird to sing, ...

I really enjoyed this! I thought everything was beautifully described, especially the mother. I also loved how you emphasized Sparrow's grace while still pointing out that she wasn't exactly what ...

I liked it and thought it was a great prologue! Awesome job! However, it was a teensy bit confusing in some parts. like here: humility in knowing that not in ...

I do have to agree with Timmy on the fact that it is a bit of a mess, but unlike him I think that the messy quality might add a ...

Like everyone else, I really, really enjoyed this! I thought it was a great message that you conveyed beautifully. It's hard to pick, but I think this is my favorite ...

I think you're off to a good start. I only say a good start, though, because to me, that's all this is (and I swear I'm not trying to be ...

This was amazing! It was so sweet and beautiful, and I didn't catch any mistakes other than the nitpicky stuff that's already been mentioned. I just really loved it, especially ...

This rocked!!! I really loved it and enjoyed reading it (as did my friend who is screaming at me to say how great it is)! This strongly reminded me of ...

I do believe I like this better than your other poem. Armageddon is more my style ^^. However, I do agree with Flemzo on some points. There were quite a ...

I think you're off to a really good start! The story and the imagery you have are awesome, but you have a few grammar mistakes, like in a couple of ...

First of all, welcome to YWS! Now, onto your poem. I really, really liked it! I can totally relate to this and I think you described everything really well. Personally, ...

Amazing poem! I really, really loved this! It actually reminded me a bit of myself, which inevitably made me like it more! I love the make-up metaphor in it, which ...

This is so beautiful! I really loved it, and the fact that roses are my favorite flower just made me love it all the more! The stanza about the black ...

Okay, this really made me laugh. I particularly loved the last line. Awesomely hilarious. It really reminded me of some of the (very) short stories I had to read at ...

Awesome poem! I think its really cool that you would be able to write something that good about pancakes. It's also kind of insane, at least in my opinion, that ...