thunder_dude7

Now that you mention it, Lord of the Rings is a great book... but really, there's a lot of: "You must set out on a great quest! But first, let ...

Oh, I read it! Everybody needs to read this book! The most shocking part, I think, was the process of butchering chickens and how sometimes, the stuff that knocks them ...

I can't wait for Brisingr to come out! I've never gotten to see what it looks like when a truck full of hardback books explodes! Wait...somebody [spoiler]GETS pregnant, implying that ...

Hello, endless secrets! I'm thunder_dude7, and I will be [s]shreding[/s] critiquing your story today! The first two paragraphs are rather info-dumpy. It just didn't feel right for me. Remember: Subtle

Guys, can we PLEASE not turn this into a debate? You want to do that, join the debate group, find the old topic, and start it up again. Anyway, this ...

After the update, the song is definetly improved. I'd make the 2nd verse a smidge longer, though. Perhaps another stanza. Oh, and regarding the bridge, I disagree with Choco. I ...

This is very good! You showed the emotion very well. Here are sosme parts I wasn't so crazy about: I can remember, The good times we had. I knew I ...

I like the title. I usually hate titles for fantasy books. Too corny. But this is good. Flames licked the sky and stained it a crimson red. Reword this, something ...

My back began to ache as I sat up *no comma* and *ommit the word "I" here* ran my hand through my knotty, unbrushed hair. I yawned, eying the board ...

Hello, gryfalcon! Thanks for being my first customer! I'm thunder_dude7, and I'll be your critiquer today! Prolouge This was pretty good. Here are a few things that I didn't care ...

I formulated a rythem, but it mut have been off, because it didn't work in some places. THe recording will fix that, I imagine. The rhyme scheme was...off. First, read ...

I've only gotten to read the first six, but I can't find anymore! WAA! I found out about them when a girl did a book report on them, and she ...

This is how it'll probably go: Eragon contued walking, left foot, right foot, left foot... Suddenly, light came and carried him on top a a cloud for no apparent reason! ...

Very good! Very good indeed! I did catch a cpuple things, though One, as insanity said, was the lack of description. You can only rely on the reader's imagination so ...

Actually, I really liked this! My favorite parts had to be the chorus and the bridge. The progression from breaking rain to a broken sea was very interesting, and the ...