thunder_dude7

Hey! I'm going to be following my usual method of critiquing as I go along, then give overall impressions at the end. Catain touched two fingers to the nose of ...

Hey! I'm thunder, and I'll be your critic for today. I'll be starting with grammer nitpicks. The group continued to drag along, being lead by three soldiers in the front, ...

Hey! Thunder here, at your request! Alright, I think the other review handled the nitpicks, so I'll focus on the overall. First of all, the girl ordered a "space burger". ...

Here with the reivew you requested! Sirens filled the air, echoing off skyscrapers and ringing out through the city. Love it! Excelent opening. This was obviously a very serious thing. ...

Alright, let's review here. First things first, I really liked this. The main character's got attitude, which is always fun. Now, I'll start off with the big thing. This seems ...

June! Hi! I'm thunder_dude7, and I will be your pure awesomeness reviewer for today. Overall, I think this was a very good piece. You did an excellent job. Now, things ...

ANCIENTS: The Odyssey = minor death. I'm doing that book for a school project - I love it. It is a bit hard to understand, but that's because it's really ...

No reviews! That's no good! Let's fix this... For the most part, this is very good. This line of dialogue was a bit awkward to read: Just as you predicted, ...

Please don't be too harsh. I can't make any promises, but I'll try. But I have to handle all of the grammar issues - I'm a perfectionist on that. Prepare ...

Hello, Demeter! I feel the need to make my horrendously small review to post ratio a little better, so...here I am. Anyway, let's take a look here... The first stanza ...

Alright...I'm stepping out. This is new to me, so...we'll see what happens. Hopefully I won't humiliate myself. Stanza 1 The final line has 1 too many syllables. I recommend taking ...

Hello! I'm thunder, TD7, whatever you want to call me. I'll be you critic for the few minutes before another person jumps on board with reviewing this. First chapters can ...

I really like the emotion here. Nice work on that. Your biggest problem in here is the rhythm. It took me a while to catch it. There are a couple ...

Preface - This really should be called a 'prologue'. Anyway... The grammar is shaky. Here's the exact text of your prologue, with fixed grammar. Can you change against your will? ...

Hello, powerofthree! I'm thunder, and I will be your critiquer for today. Well, the minute. Whatever. A young *No comma* baby lie in a crib, his parents staring straight at ...