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Didn't your mommy tell you not to play with fire. This is what happends. I'm gald you weren't hurt. And try to use common sense next time so you don't ...

I think this was quite good. I don't know how long you have been writing poetry for but the use of imagery here makes it seem like you really understand ...

I liked the ryming. The only thing is that I think it coud use more detail. Sorry, that's about all I have to say for this. Also, I not sure ...

I thought it was okay; it's kind of short though and I'm not really sure if I get the point. Also, at first, I only saw the first few words ...

The only thing I saw was that "and i know that you dont care and my heart you tore apart" Sounded a little funny other than that I tthought it ...

I had to read it two times to make sense of what you were saying. I kind of like how it's straightforward and you don't have to guess about what ...

I would get rid of and I know I won't be whole without you. It doesn't really flow with a part for me a part for you. Maybe replace it ...

That's was really funny. I didn't finish it all though it was too long.

Not bad. I like the rhyming. Sorry, my reviews are quite dull today.

I like the use of imagery and the metaphors used. Good job.

It's true but I don't like the frequentness of you cannot.

Oh, just to let you know I believe the rules are that you need to make two reviews for every story you post. Anyway, your poem did turn out well ...

There wasn't really much action and it was kind of short. I think you should add more.

Interesting.

Well, you feel the emotion in this one and I feel that it left an impact. Nice Job.