thestoryofagirl

Great start! I loved the way you got into it straight away and I found your writing style really interesting and it entertained me! I can't wait to read the ...

Loved this start! I found it really engaging and interesting. The narrator was very quick and I enjoyed that last sentence in particular: For once, work ended up being the ...

This sounds great! I loved the premise and the whole idea is very interesting. I like the sister's relationship and liked their characters, I thought they were extremely well done. ...

I really enjoyed this and though I noticed a few punctuation and grammar issues, it didn't detract from the flow or make it any less interesting. I loved the characters ...

A great start! Loved the descriptions and how you built on the characters. One thing to point out though: - He sighed, “I suppose so, but I’m afraid that forcing ...

Holy moly... what a great story! I loved the way you started it and you continued strongly, going all the way with it. I loved this bit though: "I'm not ...

I really enjoyed this and I would definitely read more. I enjoyed the descriptions and dialogue and loved that they were friends. The way you introduced the pair of them ...

I think this could be really interesting but it's very short. Also, you sort of jump into the description very quickly and don't really break it up. -I didn't notice ...

Another great chapter. I was seriously surprised to find he was only around 14! *Mind. Blow.* Also, from what I've gathered, his dad knows about him and the demon and ...

What a fantastic start! I loved the descriptions because it made it so real, you really brought the whole thing to life and made it an interesting read. I enjoyed ...

I really enjoyed this start! I liked your descriptions, though they were a little airy, I found them very engaging and interesting. I found it slightly strange that he randomly ...