theotherone

Hello there again. :) Funny, kind ; to her friends and to strangers, and she was even pretty strong. Her green eyes locked on mine, and then she smile d ...

Hello there! :) Just reading the synopsis made me want to read more, so let's hope this is better than I wished for. I'm going to make some nitpicks... If ...

Hello there. :) I have to agree with WickedWonder and Zekkie876... This is confusing. I didn't really get it. The lights are lucid today . Under the canopy, the lights ...

Hey there. :) I know it's been a while you posted this, but I'm still going to review. ;) I looked back at him, he was laughing his head of ...

Hello there. :) I'll begin with the nitpicks and then go on with the overall impression. This has been going on for weeks! Where is this going, space here If ...

Hello there. :) For the nitpicks... Well it's a poem so it's pretty hard to do that sort of thing, but I'm just going to give my opinion. Did you ...

Hello there. :) First off, like you said, there's a lot of mistakes. Either you pass through it and correct them, or you can PM me if you want me ...

Hi there. :) This is really short. A paragraph is normally not enough to call it a chapter. I hope this is just the first part of the chapter and ...

Hi there. :) First off, I don't think I saw many grammatical mistakes, so congrats for that. I agree with Zoomie, about the broken mirror, and maybe with the parent's ...

Hi there. :) I think everyone already said all the nitpicks I could think of, so there's not really much to say on this end... Apart from that, the story ...

Hi there, :) First off, I think Hibiscus, here, pretty much said it all. The flow... It really needs work. I believe that there's pauses there that don't need to ...

Hello again. :) We reached the public park that was situated halfway between the between the conservatory and the main station. Like always, this is close to spotless. Now with ...

Hello there. :) We went outside and walked in silence for a while. Outside is one word. “Would it help you if I, say, took your hand? So you could ...

Hi there. :) The most richest man in the world? The most is not needed here. Richest is more than enough for us to understand. Wait …work for him? Wait ...

Hello there. :) First off with the nitpicks. Everyone pretty much said them all, and I won't repeat those. What else should I do? He was pulling my arm These ...