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thegirlwhowrites

thegirlwhowrites

  • Short Story » Narrative, Historical Fiction Re: Second Day of Christmas

    Very nice idea, so orginal and I loved how it all revolved around the Christmas song and the second day. (Especially the connection at the ending with the two turtle ...

    Dec 21, 2013
  • Poetry » General, Dramatic Re: Ding, Dong, Ding

    Brilliant rhythm! I can see how you tried hard to make it flow, making each line of 10 syllables and having a set rhyme scheme of ABAB. I think that's ...

    Dec 21, 2013
  • Short Story » Film, General Re: The key to Life

    Hi, Really cool idea, very original. Here are just a few criticisms from me and I hope they will help! 1. "*You're on key island" (not your) 2. I just ...

    Dec 20, 2013
  • Poetry » General, Lyrical Re: I Am a Shell

    Wow. Am I even going to mention how jealous I am of you? :D I could never write such a beautiful and meaningful poem and I just really want to ...

    Dec 20, 2013
  • Short Story » Romantic, General Re: everything happens for an unknown reason

    Hi, Lovely story :D (well, not so lovely for the character) My favourite part was when you described his love for Maria, I thought that was exactly what you needed ...

    Dec 20, 2013
  • Art » General, General Re: Perfect Idea

    Hi, I have a few comments to make, hope they'll help! 1. Your style of writing seems informal, as if this was a diary entry. It is absolutely fine to ...

    Dec 20, 2013
  • Short Story » Fanfiction, General Re: The Hunger games-Rue- Part one

    Wow, nice alternate ending.. finally a happy end for our little mockingjay :') I have a few just small criticisms to make, hope they'll help! 'Katniss stirred next to me.' ...

    Dec 19, 2013
  • Short Story » Fanfiction, General Re: Respite (Mockingjay spoilers)

    (Huge HUnger Games fan just sayin ;) ) I really loved how you represented Finnick's character. How he changes throughout your short story just really captures him as a whole. ...

    Dec 19, 2013
  • Short Story » Fanfiction, General Re: Gale-A hunger Games fanfic

    I am a big, big, big tribute and I've never read anything like this... really original! I would have never imagined Dale to be a ship to be honest :D ...

    Dec 19, 2013
  • Short Story » Fanfiction, General Re: Peeta and Katniss - Forever Together

    Oh, my everlark feels!! As soon as I started I knew I had to finish. The beginning is truly the best bit, when you answer those three questions and let ...

    Dec 19, 2013
  • Poetry » Fanfiction, Dramatic Re: The Spark

    Hi, I'm a huge fan of The Hunger Games and I must say I really liked your poem. You were able to capture all the images in my mind from ...

    Dec 19, 2013
  • Novel / Chapter » Fanfiction, Action / Adventure Re: The Spark - Ch. 2

    I really enjoyed reading this. Beautifully written, simple but catchy and I loved how you kept it true to Suzanne's story. My favourite part was actually when went into depth ...

    Dec 19, 2013


If you have built castles in the air, your work need not be lost; that is where they should be. Now put the foundations under them.
— Henry David Thoreau, "Walden"